TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

All parents want to instill good virtues in their children and in order to do so they adopt various practices. But these practices may vary from person to person, some people may believe in giving money as a reward to encourage them. However, others might not concur with this notion because they think that it might spoil a child. In my opinion, I strongly oppose this idea of giving money to a child for each high grade for the following reasons.

First, school going age is a very delicate age where children are prone to get ruin easily by several factors. In modern world, there are many facilities that are available to most of the children by their parents such as TV, Mobile phones, Computer, Internet etc to help them in building a good future and also to enjoy life to the fullest. All these things can be a boon to the young generation, if they are taught to use them wisely. However, when children have unlimited pocket money, it is seen that they generally misuse it for example my friend’s daughter is fifteen yrs old and she was given a lot of money as a reward for her good grades. But soon my friend observed that she began to invest that cash on watching movies and going to club with her friends. Eventually, it affected her grades and she failed in final exams. Hence, I realized that it is not wise to give cash to children as they don’t have discernment to spend it wisely.

Second, real life is full of challenges and unexpected situations where anything can happen any time. During childhood parents do not comprehend this fact that they will not be able to support their children always and if a child does not learn to stand on his/her own feet then it would be quite difficult to survive. In real life, it is not necessary that one will always get reward for good work, there is tough competition and mean politics out there, people are ready to put their peers down to get success. Therefore, if parents will teach their child that they will always be rewarded then they are destroying his/her future indeed. I can recall when I was in Medicine school, I came first in the class but none of my peers or teachers rewarded me. This made me frustrated and I could no longer focus on my studies. Later, I realized my mistake and I changed my habit which in fact helped me throughout my career.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'for example', 'in fact', 'such as', 'in my opinion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206823027719 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.172707889126 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0746268656716 0.0866891130778 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0660980810235 0.046263068375 143% => OK
Pronouns: 0.108742004264 0.0685040099705 159% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.100213219616 0.118717715034 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0255863539446 0.0351676179071 73% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.35388588182 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.046908315565 0.0309702414327 151% => OK
Particles: 0.00213219616205 0.00188951952338 113% => OK
Determiners: 0.0533049040512 0.0887237588012 60% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0277185501066 0.0209618222197 132% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127931769723 0.0139019557991 92% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2353.0 2387.08602151 99% => OK
No of words: 423.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56264775414 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.300236406619 0.338922669872 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.198581560284 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137115839243 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0614657210402 0.112833075102 54% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35388588182 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548463356974 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 63.8627376005 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3874856283 48.84282405 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.722222222 120.699889404 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.644075263715 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 43.3581560284 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 0.957055214724 1.45489161554 66% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288964415855 0.300154397459 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0911494420204 0.103427244359 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0635411506244 0.0752933317313 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.428938716393 0.497263757937 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.112020182006 0.151897553556 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101188324494 0.114077575197 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578152674023 0.0781384742642 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.390584657741 0.336927656856 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.013658649755 0.067059652881 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220126711482 0.210909579961 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371203811757 0.0618886996521 60% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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