TPO 40
Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt nowadays education plays a key role in people's lives. no one can deny the effect of learning new things in children's daily activities. A controversial question often raised regarding this issue is how to encourage children to study more and in more efficient way. some people believe that it is better parent offer their children money for each high grade, However some others take an opposing viewpoint and believe it is not a good way to give them money. From my own perspective, the first belief is preferable. As far as I'm concerned, I think giving some money to children as a reward is a good choice. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint most prominent reasons.
First of all, one should regard this significant fact that money can be a good motivation for students to study harder. Needless to say, for doing everything incentives is absolutely vital. receiving reward from parent not only make studying less boring, but also makes it a thing that children are certainly eager to do. To demonstrate, researcher established an experimental program to estimate the effect of motivation in studying harder. the results are significant and over 90 percent of students are more enthusiastic to study when they are awarded. This clarifies that giving some money can make children study harder for better grades.
Approaching this issue, apart from the fact mentioned above, one should regard another point that thinking financially is very crucial for anyone. children can learn how to manage their money when they receive money from their parents. In other words, parents can benefit them not only in their current life, but also in their future lives. To illustrate, take for example the students who start an account in bank to deposit money received from her parents as a gift. moreover, she can put some money in her account after each of her good grades and try to learn how to save money therefore after some years there would large amount of money in her account.
Admittedly, although giving money to children as a gift has significant benefits for them, one should remember that it should not be necessary in the form of money. Actually, it is possible for parents to give their children positive feedbacks. children demand good feedbacks from parents, but it is not necessary to be money.
Actually, there are some more reasons and examples, supporting these claims, which I have refrained from mentioning above. All in all, I concur with the idea that parents give money to their school-age children for each high mark. Not only it can motivate them but also make them be more prepared with financial things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, apart from, for example, i think, no doubt, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2208.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93959731544 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58181444073 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489932885906 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.090453493 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45833333333 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28655549219 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820732843875 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760473410172 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16964669705 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307421346279 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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