As a matter of fact, nobody likes to be in a boring situation. For most people, being in a same situation is a kind of disaster. People prefer to be in a variety of situations during their workday.
First of all, doing a same thing all day is boring. People want to do something exciting. Also, doing a same thing has a negative effect on satisfaction in humankind. People are going to be dipress or unsatisfied by their job during time. For instance, I used to work in a distribiution company back in my home country Iran. One of my co-workers job was entering data in the programs. She was totally bored of her job every day and she decided to continue her education to get a master degree in statistic and be a teacher.
Second of all, people can try different situations by being in a variety of situations. They can experience new things and they can increase their knowledge in different situations and majors. Being expert in lot of topics is a kind of pleasant. For example, one of my friends in college got a part time job in a company back in my home country. She did a great job in all of those tasks that she had to do. After graduation, she went to a big size company in the capital city in our country and she was knowledgeable in a variety of topics on that time, so she got a really good salary. These kinds of people like my friend that I mentioned before are useful for companies and they can find a job easily.
To sum up, being doing something different every day is a nice thing for people. They are tempting to do something new every day. Doing different tasks made people happy and satisfied with their life, because they can learn more and they can be away of boring feelings.
Essay evaluation report
People are going to be dipress or unsatisfied
People are going to be depressed or unsatisfied
Sentence: People are going to be dipress or unsatisfied by their job during time.
Error: dipress Suggestion: depress
Sentence: For instance, I used to work in a distribiution company back in my home country Iran.
Error: distribiution Suggestion: distribution
flaws:
No. of Words: 318 while No. of Different Words: 153
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
or Try this pattern in details:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First
Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ...first,....second...
Para 5: Conclusion.
An simple example (Eating at home or restaurant) for paragraph 2:
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence: Eating at home can save money) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences: I can prepare cheaper food from food market; I don't need to drive or take a bus to reach the restaurant; I don't need to pay tips...) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentence: for example, a sandwich can cost me $10 at restaurant, but it only cost me $5 at home.) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences: with the money I saved, I can buy a good book to read; I can use the money for a trip...).
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 19 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1349 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.242 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.482 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 88 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.655 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.318 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 402, Rule ID: BORED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
...g data in the programs. She was totally bored of her job every day and she decided to co...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ple, one of my friends in college got a part time job in a company back in my home countr...
^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'as a matter of fact', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25787965616 0.229887763892 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.14899713467 0.158761421928 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0773638968481 0.0866891130778 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0229226361032 0.046263068375 50% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0773638968481 0.0685040099705 113% => OK
Prepositions: 0.151862464183 0.118717715034 128% => OK
Participles: 0.0401146131805 0.0351676179071 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5681410174 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0315186246418 0.0309702414327 102% => OK
Particles: 0.00286532951289 0.00188951952338 152% => OK
Determiners: 0.0916905444126 0.0887237588012 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0171919770774 0.0209618222197 82% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0139019557991 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1703.0 2387.08602151 71% => OK
No of words: 318.0 408.028673835 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35534591195 5.86048508987 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.276729559748 0.338922669872 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.198113207547 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.132075471698 0.174417080927 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103773584906 0.112833075102 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5681410174 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.524397521467 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.4432372785 59.2087087015 84% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.9 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2220101641 48.84282405 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.15 120.699889404 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.65 0.644075263715 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 35.7113207547 45.7405998639 78% => OK
Elegance: 1.80459770115 1.45489161554 124% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221721835838 0.300154397459 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0984824651495 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0948252377647 0.0752933317313 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.476900111947 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.120864329978 0.151897553556 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916561065077 0.114077575197 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587391412796 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.343662193606 0.336927656856 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0921615910615 0.067059652881 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167499614068 0.210909579961 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594093750208 0.0618886996521 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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