Throughout history, the family has played a prominent role in all societies. Due to its paramount importance, individual decisions could be affected by their family background attitudes. Some people may hold the view that the young people choices were more rely on their parents in the past, and nowadays, youths have better function in planning their own lives. However, some others may look at this concept through a different lens. I am of the opinion that this contention is accurate. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons, which will aptly elucidate my idea.
First and foremost, thanks to the development of technology, nowadays people can gain massive amounts of information in a short time. By considering this fact, young people are able to improve their knowledge in distinctive fields of life in order to make better decisions by themselves without their parents interfering. To be more specific, in the past, the younger once more relied on the family tradition ways, and they virtually tended to follow their family routes. In such a situation, their lives approach more depended on their parents' preference.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that there were more ties in terms of family income in the past era. In other words, the financial attachments of younger people to their families more seen at that time. In fact, these families' revenue was earned through just one member and mostly provided by the fathers. Moreover, according to the limitation of job varieties, most of the youths continued their fathers' occupation, which gave rise to more dependency on their parents eventually.
To put it briefly, from what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the affections of family perspective on the young members' decisions have been more observed in the past. The technology developments and extensive choices for youths lead to turn them to an independent person in their choices at present. Consequently, it is highly recommended that the parents should not restrict their children in order to obey their approaches since the more independence in the youth decision making, the more efficiently they might accomplish their duties.
- TPO 44 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- TPO 45: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and ex 76
- TPO-20 - Integrated Writing Task 60
- TPO 21 - Integrated TOEFL essay 83
- T P O 20 - Integrated TOEFL essay 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'families'' or 'family's'?
Suggestion: families'; family's
... more seen at that time. In fact, these families revenue was earned through just one mem...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23055555556 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75630450171 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2240130445 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.764705882 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279790983633 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866366902743 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889447141371 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182308359787 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587890254421 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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