TPO 45: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
deciding is a momentous matter for human being and this action is more important for young people. our future life will be constructed according to our present decisions. Some people believe that juveniles were more relied on their parents for making decisions in the past and they are more independent nowadays. personally, I confirm this statement and I think that young people behave more independently today and they select their way individually. I will substantiate my notion in the following paragraphs.
The first thing coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that level of literacy has been increased markedly in current generations. Therefore, in one hand their ability for obtaining more information is broader and on the other hand the accelerated rate of technological advances help young people to have access of great information resources. As a result, they could make decision more wisely based on their knowledge. For example, when I finished high school, I should select a university for continuing my education. I investigate a lot through internet and in addition I consulted with educated people by visiting them or by means of social network applications. Eventually, I selected a university which was very suitable for me. As you can see, I had access to vast source of information that was very beneficial for making a correct decision.
The second reason behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that young people become autonomous sooner than the past. juveniles are more intelligent and well-educated these days so they could find a well-paid job in the last years of university. Their noticeable wage stimulates them to live separately from their parents. In order to shed lights in this issue I share one of my personal experiences. my nephew is bachelor degree student in a college. he found a job six month ago and he wants to rent a house recently. this matter stimulates him to decide for himself.
In brief, I should aver that young people are more autonomous today and make their personal decisions individually because not only they have access to great source of knowledge and well-informed people but also they become independent from their parents in younger ages which fuels them to act lonely.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, in addition, in brief, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09919571046 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90295421165 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563002680965 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0527060173 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29104768392 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079331871012 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764284725804 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190898915534 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053270331768 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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