Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Strategy for being successful could be completely different among humans. Various parameters are effective for an individual to make decision for obtaining a goal. Congenital characteristics such as courage and talent or acquired ones like diligence are influencial. some people prefer to continue their ongoing activities but some are prone to take risks and make their pursuits more efficient. personally, I confirm the latter one and I believe that taking risk is an indispenable requirement for attaining success. I feel this way due to several important reasons which I will explain them in the following.
first, I think that novel situations are the principal by-product of taking risk. In fact, being different is the main meaning of taking risk. A risky person must think different, must act in a separate way and in some cases shall oppose with ongoing believes of common people. As a result, coping with these new situations leads to improve the abilities and capacitis of an individual. For instance, I decided to choose an unprecedented subject for my master degree research project. my decision was not reasonable at the first sight and most of my friends tried to dissuade me from making that decision. I never listened to them because I had some great thoughts in my mind. I underwent numerous challenges after taking the project but I did my best to got rid of those problems. Eventually, I Paased the project successfully with three published papers in well-known journals and alongside this accomplishment I learned some instrumental softwares too.
Second, useful inventions which we utilize them nowadays are the results of risks that former people took. For example, phone, electricity, internet, airplane and so forth. How could be our life without these facilities. As a result, I believe that we must reciprocate the favor of past generation by means of putting ourseleves in more challengble situations to invent a new thing to facilitate life of our next generation.
In conclusion, I should assert that taking risk is the basis of success for ourselves and for the next generations. Not only taking risk leads to increase our abilities but also it is necessary for making our lifestyle more desirable and easier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15890410959 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9478051604 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591780821918 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9040671904 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6666666667 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.80952380952 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152631536592 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438698048727 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383899586929 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0954878881799 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168751925525 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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