TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

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TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

obtaining our goals in the future is a momentous subject for human. our success is thoroughly depends on our purposes and our efforts and most importantly our behavior. some people believe that being diligent in educational issues is more important rather than social ability but personally, I think that capability of relating with people is more instrumental for becoming an accomplished person for ourselves and for our society. I will substantiate my point of view in the following paragraphs.

The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that people will be exposed to numerous situations to learn novel matters by having strong relationship with other people. For example, how to be humorous? how to be hardworking? how could we earn more money? how we could be a good researcher? All of these experiences will be achieved easily by having broad relationships with others.

The second reason behind my opinion is rooted in a fact that possibility of our success will soared if we broaden our friendship with more people because these friends sometimes suggest us some unpredictable ways for triumph. In order to shed lights on this matter I will explain one of my personal experiences. my friend, Ali, is an easygoing person and he always begins to speak with other people in different situations. As a result, he has innumerable friends in varied administration offices and different universities even overseas. one year ago, he could get admission for PHD in one of well-known abroad universities in favor of one his friends that he had found in a scientific convention. As you can see being an easygoing person could be very beneficial and unpredictable in some cases.

In brief, I believe that having widespread relationship or even friendship with other people is essential for being successful in the future because not only we will obtain numerous traits from different people but also they will be prone to help us and recommend us some unpredictable positions which facilitate our way for accomplishment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, for example, i think, in brief, as a result, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13313609467 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04103012488 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541420118343 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.8283951215 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.058823529 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168176017181 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524751543119 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533710181424 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109705750588 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459506791488 0.0645574589148 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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