TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

I disagree with this statement, I believe that the opinions of celebrities are more important to older people than young people for the following reasons.

To begin with, usually, the younger people's models are their parents, they do not watch television when they are not supervised by adults. Most of the time younger people do not understand the difficult issues which usually celebrities or athletes are talking about, therefore they often ask their parents for their opinion or explanations, because the younger people trust more what their parents believe rather than people that they never met in person, and the subjects of the celebrities and athletes are not really something which younger people are interested in. This is one reason why I reckon that celebrities' opinions it is not more important to young people than they are for adults.

The second reason why I believe that celebrities and athletes' opinions are more important for older people is that they are models for most of the adults. All of us have a favorite celebrity or athlete who we follow on TV and admire, for older people is more important the opinion of celebrities because they see them as an example to follow as well as younger people do with their parents. Furthermore, older people do not only pay more attention to celebrities' declarations, but they also imitate them such as in their looks and lifestyles. This is the proof that for many adults what famous people do are very important for them.

Finally, younger people are much more interested in cartoons and other educational programs, which usually do to host any celebrities or athletes, older people are more curious and keen to know about their "heroes". these are the reasons why I believe that famous people's opnions have more influence on adults than they have on younger people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...stand the difficult issues which usually celebrities or athletes are talking abou...
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...to know about their 'heroes'. these are the reasons why I believe that famo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, well, i reckon, such as, talking about, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02280130293 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67386833609 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4332247557 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.8200409394 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.2 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9 5.45110844103 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346684052943 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185952795573 0.076458572812 243% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564161259217 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263299754631 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332586190993 0.0645574589148 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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