Historically speaking, prehistoric people constantly was trying to understand their surroundings to survive. Thus, their desire to gain knowledge and comprehension about the world has passed through genes to the next generations. Regarding this, there is a heated controversy as to whether it is still important to know about the events happening all over the world or not. I, personally, subscribe to the former notion and I have two reasons, among which making an adaptation to avoid disasters and help other people in hardship is the most conspicuous.
First, although some events in a different continent seem unlikely to have a direct effect on our current lives, they may change our lifestyle in near future and we must be well-prepared. Thus, people should have a thorough understanding of the consequences of events happening. For instance, the Coronavirus first emerged in China and just adversely changed the lifestyle of Chinese people, not other individuals. After a few days, however, casualties increased dramatically. Therefore, countries whose people were following the news in China could take immediate measures to prevent the prevalence of the disease. In spite the fact that the pandemic was inevitable, the virus would have taken a heavier toll if people had not paid attention. Moreover, people by gaining vast knowledge about incidents that have happened can avoid making the same mistake again, which may cause massive irreparable losses. For Instance, the catastrophe of Chornobyl has alerted other nations to improve the safety of their nuclear stations.
Secondly, some events may just have an impact on a few people, yet we, as human beings, are analogous to a whole body. When an organ is in pain the whole body would lose its functionality. If one person realizes that poverty-stricken people are suffering in another country from malnutrition, he or she would restlessly try to improve the situation. They try to help through financial support, volunteer activities, or informing other people in order to rise awareness, to name but a few. Hence, reading the news constantly plays a crucial role to seize adverse circumstances and make the world a better place to live. A great example of what I mentioned is the death of George Floyd in the United States. Afterward, people all around the world protested to stop discrimination against black people, even though they were not black, not did they live in America.
With all the above-mentioned reasons taken into account, it stands to reason that knowing about happenings around the world is of great consequence not only to prevent repeated mistakes but also to help others. Therefore, I am of the opinion that people, especially relevant authorities, should continuously watch and read the news so as to boost their knowledge in this regard, taking immediate action for improvement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ing this, there is a heated controversy as to whether it is still important to know about the...
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Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... beings, are analogous to a whole body. When an organ is in pain the whole body woul...
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Line 7, column 333, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ld continuously watch and read the news so as to boost their knowledge in this regard, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25434782609 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9708500308 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591304347826 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9300976509 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.095238095 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9047619048 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137677220616 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362341906564 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05164157544 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873407956045 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195991403986 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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