TPO 47:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
There are many accidents and events that are happening around the world every second. A controversial argument that is raised regarding this topic is whether one should be aware of those phenomena, and it should be important for a person who is hearing them or not. I believe that it is one of the most prominent things that anyone should do. I will substantiate my belief by providing two critical reasons that are elucidated below.
The first reason corroborating my stance is that human beings must think of other people, living far away from themselves, as an equal. In other words, one should help with all the effort one possesses to reduces the pain or lowers the burden those people bear. I have forged the belief by listening and watching various programs on mass media that "humans must help and support each other, regardless of the gender, race, and skin color." This is crystal clear that although an event might not bother one person, one is obliged to apply any means to heightens the level of convenience and peace in the world. This support is not just restricted by the donation of money, but one can share his or her invaluable ideas. As a result, if all the people in the world hold this view toward the events occurring worldwide, there is a good chance one person gives a practical idea to overcome a situation. If one neglects what is happening in other places simply because it is not directly related to them, how could they call themselves humans?
The second reason is that it gives the person ideas about the wrongdoings and severity that are being run in other places as well as devising a solution to avoid it. To clarify my point, it helps one to understand and use others' experiences to evade, hinder, or even prohibit such difficulties that may affect their own country or region. If we do not pay attention to the mistakes that other countries make, we might run into them ourselves. Knowing about events, one might come up with novel notions to never trap in the same situation. Imagine no one ever thought about the calamity that other people are struggling in. He or she would not capitalize on their advantage of being ready to face it. Also, there is a chance that they lose time and money as it took them time and costs to prepare themselves.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that one should be alert and gain enough knowledge about an event, notwithstanding it might not have any impact on their lives. Not only is it humans' obligation to help others, but it also gives the opportunity to be ready to confront the same difficulty if they face in the future without unnecessary expenses.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...it should be important for a person who is hearing them or not. I believe that it is one o...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'reduce'.
Suggestion: reduce
...lp with all the effort one possesses to reduces the pain or lowers the burden those peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70905172414 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56348404875 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549568965517 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4997328064 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114061638115 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.039393331658 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381791281625 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741880695973 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232225359641 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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