TPO 47-Independent
No one can cast a shadow of doubt in the fact that in today's sophisticated world we live in, being aware of events that occur around us can have some influences on some aspects of our lives. Though understanding about the occurrence in all around the world might have benefits, its negative effects on our spirits have been a subject of contention. Some may think awareness about events around the world is more significant for people even if they do not affect our daily life. While others may disagree. They prefer to pay attention to the events that have impacts on their life. I personally concur with the former group's idea. In what follows, my opinions would be delineated.
To begin with, by understanding occurrence in the world you can increase not only your daily information but also your experiences. I believe that there is a prominent lesson is located behind every event. If you pay much attention to the rationale behind the events, you will probably learn new things from that. By way of illustration, in one documentary, it is shown that the people in France protest against the manager of the subway. After seeing this video meticulously, I found out, one of the subways in France did not have an appropriate way for disable persons to reach the train. I used this method when I was working for a rail company.
the second reason is rooted in the fact that knowing about happens around the can motivate us to help other people who live in bad condition. In this era, most of the events are related to war between two countries or in one country and its citizens such as Syria. For instance, when I saw the TV news I understood that the people of Syria live in poor condition. Their quality of their life caused me to help them. I tried to participate to a camping that gives these persons high-quality foods. It follows that, although the condition of living individuals of Syria does not affect my daily life, that was a good impetus for me to assist them.
In conclusion, some may oppose to my standpoints but based on aforementioned grounds, It is better for us to know events that happen in all around the world. Depend on the events we can promote our general information about them by finding the reasoning behind them. Also, some special events lead us to assist other people regardless of the difference of our culture.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218543046358 0.229887763892 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.156732891832 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0529801324503 0.0866891130778 61% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0331125827815 0.046263068375 72% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0949227373068 0.0685040099705 139% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.163355408389 0.118717715034 138% => OK
Participles: 0.0309050772627 0.0351676179071 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61719805318 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0309050772627 0.0309702414327 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.101545253863 0.0887237588012 114% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0242825607064 0.0209618222197 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0198675496689 0.0139019557991 143% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2360.0 2387.08602151 99% => OK
No of words: 415.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68674698795 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.320481927711 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.192771084337 0.251872472559 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.120481927711 0.174417080927 69% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0939759036145 0.112833075102 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61719805318 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53734939759 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 61.4735741132 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8636363636 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8646726955 48.84282405 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.272727273 120.699889404 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8636363636 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 38.1407447974 45.7405998639 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.4496124031 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0818062924559 0.103427244359 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.066197089407 0.0752933317313 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.44351854967 0.497263757937 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.161230900249 0.151897553556 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.406094055144 0.336927656856 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0208567964011 0.067059652881 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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