TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

Being aware of what is happening around the world influences people's life from different angles. First of all, it makes competitive advantage. Second, it increases people's knowledge. Finally, it enables people to help each other. Thus, I strongly agree with the statement.
To know about events happening around the world makes competitive advantages. It is very important, especially for businessmen, to know what is going on around the globe. Nowadays, technology progresses second by second. If a company wants to win the competition with other companies and attract more customers, managers should be aware of these advancements and use them in order to improve their product.
In addition, it increases people's knowledge. I believe that being aware of what is going on throughout the world, makes people to be up-to-date. For example, I like soccer and I always follow its news. Thus, I can be informed about what is happening in the soccer world and share my knowledge with the other people. On the other hand, being informed about the latest changes in the world enables people to get promotion in their jobs.
Furthermore, it enables people to help each other. Nowadays, news disperse rapidly through internet and people can be informed about occurances around the world much easier than before. This fact enables people to help each other better. For example, several years ago a terrible earthquake was occurred in my country and unfortunately many people dead. When this news dispersed throughout the world, people from other countries sent their aids to sufferers.
In conclusion, it is important to be aware of what is going on around the globe, because it causes many advantages for people. First of all, it makes competitive advantages for companies to win the competition and attract more customers. Also, it increases people's knowledge and improve their communication. Besides, it may help people to help each other better.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.22625698324 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.173184357542 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0865921787709 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0418994413408 0.046263068375 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0670391061453 0.0685040099705 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125698324022 0.118717715034 106% => OK
Participles: 0.036312849162 0.0351676179071 103% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76553329803 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.036312849162 0.0309702414327 117% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0670391061453 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0111731843575 0.0209618222197 53% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0167597765363 0.0139019557991 121% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1950.0 2387.08602151 82% => OK
No of words: 313.0 408.028673835 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.23003194888 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.386581469649 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.290734824281 0.251872472559 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201277955272 0.174417080927 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.156549520767 0.112833075102 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76553329803 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466453674121 0.524397521467 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.1113724567 59.2087087015 78% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 13.6086956522 20.5533526081 66% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4999936988 48.84282405 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7826086957 120.699889404 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6086956522 20.5533526081 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.644075263715 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 42.6821780803 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.37623762376 1.45489161554 95% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304442654567 0.300154397459 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.07556141623 0.103427244359 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0853277212664 0.0752933317313 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.462046553037 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138654878605 0.151897553556 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113562924102 0.114077575197 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829049271493 0.0781384742642 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.349516520956 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0475601662028 0.067059652881 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222045984969 0.210909579961 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649325578048 0.0618886996521 105% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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