There is no misgiving that nowadays, being organized plays the pivotal role in people's lives. No one can gainsay the effect of this ability on our daily lives. A controversial question which is often raised concerning this issue is that whether complexity of modern life brings about the need for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Some people may hold this viewpoint that it is essential for young people to have planning ability in our complicated and modern life. Some others, nevertheless, may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that young people without the ability of planning can easily manage in our modern and complex life. From my own perspective, the first belief is true for some conspicuous needs which are pinpointed and elaborated in the following paragraphs.
One of the reasons coming to mind at first is that modern life makes people busy. One has to work a considerable amount of his day time to can afford the cost of his family because modern life provides us with a lot of commodities which sometimes are expensive. Working a lot and the responsibility for family necessitate young people to be organized. Even, sometimes young people may be responsible for their old parents. All of these cases together require one to be organized as much as they can. Even though as a simple example, imagine a young couple who has a child. Only when they work all day long, are they able to overcome the cost of their family. In addition to working, they require to plan for taking their child to and from her or his school. As you can see, everyone really needs to be organized and planed.
Another equally important reason is that in modern life there is more competition. There are a lot of facilities in our modern society. Often, these resources are not enough to meet the needs of all people which mean people would have to compete for the resources. To obtain the facility that one needs in an especial time, they should be organized. Again, as a tangible and simple example, one is required to be at work place on time. It is going without saying that everyone knows most people have to commute to get their work especially in big cities. To be on time at work, they need to know when they should be at train station for both crowded transportation system and estimation some delays. As you can see, had one not planned, they would have got their work with some delays.
To wrap it up, it is my deep belief that people particularly young people require to be planned and organized. Not only does modern life make people busy, but it also causes some inevitable and inconspicuous competition. All in all, the more one is planned and organized, the more they will be calmed in our modern life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69294605809 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55136114808 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448132780083 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0047868284 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5384615385 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73076923077 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277341203872 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865956499985 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808433538317 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187610965009 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807088927383 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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