Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Making decision is an important part of our lives. We have to make decision about employment, marriage, education. We have to decide about a lot of things in our everyday life. Some people belive that in the past young people dependent on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to mjake decision about their own lives; others disagree. In my view, youth are better able to make decision about their own lives than in the past for several imprtant reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First, technology advances every day. It is obvious that for making a good decision you need some related information. In the past young people did not have those information so they had to rely on their parents or others. But now every one can access to a lot of information about a variety of subjects. They can gain their essential information through the Internet easily and quickly. For example, when I was in high school I needed to declare my major to study at university. I create an excel file and listed some of interested areas. I use the Internet and find a lot of information about them such as which universitis have my interests, where those universitie are situated, whether they are near my house or are away and so on. After that I listed them based on some factors such as my interest, distance, their ranks. Finaly I selected Computer engineering in my city. It was very easy. As you can see, I just research about what I need and make my own decision myself.
Second, valuse and mitivations are changed during the time. Youth are a new generation. Values are changed, as a result, it is important that they can make a better decision than their parents. For example, in my family, my parents try to make decision based on their beliefs which sometime are against my beliefs. One time I wanted to make decision about employment. I had three options of jobs: a computer teacher, a sales manager, a programer in a computer company. My parents recommended me to be a computer teacher. They said it is a good work because you teach at school and you would have some respect. On the other hand, I intended to study computer in abroad. As a matter of fact, I needed some considerable money to go abroad. So I had to opt a sales manager. So your values and motivation may be very different from your parents which result in different decisions.
To sum up, I strongly believe that young people are better able to make decision. Not only does technology advance, but values and motivations are changed from one generation to another. To make decision every one are better able to make decision about their own lives but they can consult with their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 157, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
.... In the past young people did not have those information so they had to rely on their parents or...
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Line 2, column 291, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to a lot of information about a variety of subjects. They can gain their essenti...
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Line 2, column 490, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... major to study at university. I create an excel file and listed some of interested area...
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Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ions are changed during the time. Youth are a new generation. Values are changed, a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65833333333 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58593618874 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2871392794 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.875 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03125 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422757170716 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100948380664 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137640190517 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314116960706 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159719535969 0.0645574589148 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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