There is no doubt that nowadays people suffer from hectic lives and no one could deny this fact. A vast majority of people are of the opinion that these days art plays a pivotal role in the development of a country from the cultural aspect because in this way the society could introduce the culture of the country to people all over the world. I, contrary to popular belief, contend that it is more beneficial for the government to dedicate its limited budget in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples to explicate my vantage point.
One of the reasons coming to my mind at first is that nowadays, by encouraging people with financial prizes, we can have a more healthier society. As all of us know, Many people are leading hectic lives, as a result, their need to exercise increase at a high rate every day. A study was carried out by a group of researchers at Oxford University on the source of recent surveys. Its results indicated that people in the 2020 decade are suffering from health problems such as obesity, which is the result of sedentary life in their hectic lives, 20 percent more than the 2010 decade. It undoubtedly shows that by encouraging people to e
Another equally noteworthy point on corroborating my stance in this subject is that in this way the government can get much more benefit from the athletic's achievement. As a case in point, I remember that Micheal Philips was an American swimmer who merely wone the four gold medal in Olympic 2016. His wonderful success led to that the USA became the next country in which Olympic will be held in 2020.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that in the modern era, it is more of a benefit to allocate more money on an encouraging field such as athletic than art. However, that was a story in nutshell. Actually, there are other reasons and examples elaborating on this idea which is not mentioned due to the shortage of time. Finally, it is suggested that the government give more priority to allot more budget to athletics and dedicate the remaining budget to art.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...le with financial prizes, we can have a more healthier society. As all of us know, Many people...
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Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as athletic 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...n an encouraging field such as athletic than art. However, that was a story in nutsh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, however, if, so, no doubt, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71761658031 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64859220573 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533678756477 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.1119826533 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.4 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7333333333 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195993698366 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607362021916 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739813972305 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113959217027 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607422912992 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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