By and large, the role of Governments in flourishing or abolishing any kinds of activities, in modern society which we live in, is undeniable. There are a plethora of people who are in the conviction that monetary expenditures should aim promoting art rather than athletic activities. While others take a radically different point of view, asserting that governments should financially support sports more than art. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I accord with the second group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, the essence of democracy is, to take into account the common good. Sports by far, are more pervasively followed by people in comparison to art. Looking to commercial television shows, one can easily sense their tendency toward what people consider more entertaining, meaning sport. Seems preposterous for the governments, which are only means that people use to achieve their goals more conveniently, to invest less in what "the most" favors. Acting on their own fictions image of what is right, government in Iran decided to promote aesthetic forms, in the expense of sports abandonment. Failed teams soared the fire of anger and fierce in people and results were absolutely catastrophic. Sports fan poured into street after a humiliating failure of a wrestling team and five people died. This ascending trend of violence action were not to be restricted, more would have died. This act of aggression has never been seen regarding artistic failures. No one has blamed the government for the failure of its artists, since apparently little, cared enough.
Secondly, Promoting sport activities in a society can lead to a healthier one. Sports deal directly with people's wellbeing and can effect on other expenditures as well. Healthier people consume less medicine and therefore save subsides that government is obligated to spend on people's health system. Take my uncle for example, going to gym on regular bases, he hasn't struggled with any hardcore diseases that may interfere with his personal life for more than 1 day. Scientific discoveries also attest to the positive direct relations of sports and health. Seems far fetch for one to be recovered from flue due to his interest in art or his observation of any aesthetic form, but there are many who have done so by exercising.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons and explanations leads to the conclusion that governments should put the sports first in comparison to art, since they can gain public affection more efficiently and spend less money in total in the same breath.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in short, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85693937881 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603686635945 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.508749707 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.863636364 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7272727273 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147533261298 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397577151251 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049600192457 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101293527482 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457216248671 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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