TPO 6:
Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
Views differs when it comes to the convenience of life throughout the time. Some people are inclined toward the idea that life is easier today compare to the past. However, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that life was more comfortable when our grandparents were children. In my perspective, life in the present day is easier that it was when our grandparents were juvenlies. I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first reason worth mentioning is that the developement of technology provide comfortable facilities for people. Nowadays, people can use faster vehilce like trains and airplanes for going to travel. They do not consume people like the old days which take a long time to reach the destination. Therefore, people do not become tired and easily get to the place they want visit. Moreover, people have access to the internet all around the world. In the past, people should go to the bank to tranfer their money but now they can easily transfer their currency without leaving house with the use of the internet. Also, there are subways for people to use which prevent traffic. many people use public transportation system in the past and because of that it causes major traffic. Nevertheless, the subway encourage people to use it since it helps them to not stuck in traffic and because of that the traffic decreased.
The more subtle point is that the knowledge of the people are improved compare to the past. In the past days, people gets unfamiliar illness which doctors did not have a solution for it. In contrast, humans knowledge is enhanced and if someone get sick, there are many treatment ways for him. For example, my grandfather have a problem in his stomach which any doctors did not know the problem and after a while he passed away. But, today there are medicine to solve these kind of problems. Also, people are well aware of materials which are dangarous for their body. For instance, many people avoid some kind of food and nutrients since it has negative and harmful effects on their health. Therefore, people become more healthier than past which people did not have this information.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are more suitable conditions for people in relative to the time when our grandparents were young because not only the technolodgy enhanced but also people information are increased.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 677, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...or people to use which prevent traffic. many people use public transportation system...
^^^^
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...ns knowledge is enhanced and if someone get sick, there are many treatment ways for...
^^^
Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... But, today there are medicine to solve these kind of problems. Also, people are well awar...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... their health. Therefore, people become more healthier than past which people did not have thi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94621026895 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61464893817 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518337408313 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.6981140095 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9565217391 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7826086957 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86956521739 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176463254543 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566567918144 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100025552404 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15204240984 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169714141339 0.0645574589148 263% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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