Agree or disagree?
TPO 12 - It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
Views differ when it comes to people's information and understanting. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that there is more beneficial to be familiar with many academic areas. However, some other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that, having solid knowledge in on specific area are better.In my point of view, there are more merit for people to have academic knowledge of broad subjects.
The first reason worth mentioning is that due to the knowldege of many academic subject, people can be more successful. In these days, developement of the technology creates alters the old fashioned jobs. In the past day, it was neccesary for people to have a advance knwodelge in one specific field to get a job. Because of that many people focused only on on specific area. Nowadays, the advancement of the technology create new jobs and areas which are different. One these area is Data Science which is a new demanding job in every company. These new career have application in all academic subjects and help us to acheive better result in that area. Therefore, because of this new situation, a person who have a more basic knowledge, have a more rate of success compare to others.
A furthur more subtle to point out is that study adverse source of science can help people to understand themself better. nowadays, many people do not have a passion in their life and do not know what their solution is. They get bored easilty and many of them study something that their parents told them. Have a vast knowledge can help these people since of the way that a person can find his like is to work. He is familiar with many academic subject. He can spend his time in single area and test all of them. After a while he can say which one he prefer between them. Therefore, by have a vast understanding of academic subject people can understand themselves better than other. For example, when my brother finished his college education, he was an expert in Civil Engineering. But he was not happy of it since my parent force him to choose this area. He lost his passion in life and after that he attend in different classes and extend his knowledge in other fields. After one year he understand he is passionate about history and know study it.
To make a long story short, there are more merits for people to have a vast understanding of academic subjects due to the mentioned reasons in up paragraphs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
Views differ when it comes to peoples information and understanting. Some peo...
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Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...nowledge in on specific area are better.In my point of view, there are more merit ...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ay, it was neccesary for people to have a advance knwodelge in one specific field...
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Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lge in one specific field to get a job. Because of that many people focused only on on ...
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Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: on
...ecause of that many people focused only on on specific area. Nowadays, the advancemen...
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Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'these areas'?
Suggestion: this area; these areas
...jobs and areas which are different. One these area is Data Science which is a new demandin...
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Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nowadays
...p people to understand themself better. nowadays, many people do not have a passion in t...
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Line 5, column 514, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...me in single area and test all of them. After a while he can say which one he prefer ...
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Line 5, column 552, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
.... After a while he can say which one he prefer between them. Therefore, by have a vast...
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Line 5, column 993, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'understands'.
Suggestion: understands
...edge in other fields. After one year he understand he is passionate about history and know...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70212765957 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55525921 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48463356974 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5414291136 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.875 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242576206911 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747052916773 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755884545691 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157925302662 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246757056006 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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