TPO 12 - It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
Views differ when it comes to people's information and understanding. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that there is more beneficial to be familiar with many academic areas. However, some other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that having solid knowledge in on specific area are better. In my point of view, there are more merits for people to have broad academic knowledge.
The first reason worth mentioning is that a person who has a vast academic knowledge has a better chance to progress these days. Nowadays, the development of technology alters the roles of people and connected all areas together. The link between areas is the new form of jobs. There is a lot of new skill that we can use its application in all area. Therefore, it is necessary for us to have a broad academic knowledge for using this application. For example, there are many data collected by humans today. Skilled people can use new method on this collected data and gain valuable information from them. Also, these data help us to make a better prediction. These method that we use them on data is the process of data or a data scientist job. It requires many different area like statistics, math, computer science and based its application other areas. The use of methods increased in the past years and all company need them. So, a person have a basic knowledge of different science can use these method and progress faster than other people.
A further more subtle point is that having an adverse source of knowledge of other sciences help people to understand their own passion. One of the problem of many student and people is that they do not know what they are passionate about and like. All of the people have a special gift and if they use it correctly can enjoy their life and gain peace. Also, many people choose a certain field of study because of the force of their parent. Therefore, they understand that they do not have an interest in that area after years. Nevertheless, people who are experienced in broad knowledge can understand easily what they like because they are familiar with the application of other areas. For instance, my brother was a top student in math, history and statistic. After he finished college, my parent forces him to study civil engineering. When he graduate from university, he did not care about civil and tried to find an area in which he likes. Based on his experience in high school, he decided to study statistics for his master's program because he was familiar with its works and subjects.
To make a long story short, there are more merits for people to have a vast understanding of academic subjects due to the mentioned reasons in up paragraphs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
Views differ when it comes to peoples information and understanding. Some peo...
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Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[6]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'vast academic knowledge'.
Suggestion: vast academic knowledge
...rth mentioning is that a person who has a vast academic knowledge has a better chance to progress these d...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[6]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'broad academic knowledge'.
Suggestion: broad academic knowledge
...erefore, it is necessary for us to have a broad academic knowledge for using this application. For example...
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Line 3, column 661, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this method' or 'These methods'?
Suggestion: This method; These methods
...ta help us to make a better prediction. These method that we use them on data is the process...
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Line 3, column 759, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ta or a data scientist job. It requires many different area like statistics, math, computer sc...
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Line 3, column 997, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this method' or 'these methods'?
Suggestion: this method; these methods
... knowledge of different science can use these method and progress faster than other people. ...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun student seems to be countable; consider using: 'many students'.
Suggestion: many students
...heir own passion. One of the problem of many student and people is that they do not know wha...
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Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...hat they are passionate about and like. All of the people have a special gift and if they ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2238.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77185501066 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57294682678 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462686567164 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5045973028 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8888888889 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3703703704 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40740740741 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191411601777 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496247629566 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516309717771 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125316108832 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340381541228 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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