In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Controversy exists over whether it is mandatory for children to know the knowledge of money management. As far as I am concerned, it is necessary for children to manage money in order to be more responsible as adults because not only do children learn the importance of money but also, they become more successful in the future. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my case.
The first reason worth mentioning is that money management teaches children the value of money. In modern life, the value of money has been increased in comparison to recent years. Parents have to work really hard to increase their income and they cannot supply all the needs of children. Teenagers are immature with abundant requests and do not pay attention to the situation that parents deal with. Because of that, parents should give an amount of money for a certain time or event give them money based on doing chores such as putting the garbage out. In this way, children learn money is not easy to earn and has limits. After that, they learn do not to ask for irrational requests from parents to buy expensive purchases. For instance, my sisters did not pay attention to our parent's income and always ask for expensive toys. To solve this issue, my parents give him only if she cleans his room and after that, she learned the value of money.
A furthur more subtle point is that children can progress better in their adult life. Children have a fresh mind and can learn different subjects in a very fast time in comparison to adults. Moreover, teenagers do not deal with arduous challenges and problems and only think about themselves. Because of that, they can learn lessons in financial problems and money management and since their mind is free, they can acquire knowledge easily. When they grow up and go to university, they know how to divide their money to cover all expenses in 1 month or even save money for emergency conditions. If they do not experience and learn these lessons at a young age, they will waste money and after facing problems such as no money for buying books or well quality food in the university, they learn it. For instance, when my best friend went to college, his allowance covers all his needs for 1 month. Before the end of the month, he spend most of his money, and he did not have any dinner money and because of that, he suffered a lot of hunger.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, it is crucial for children to learn how to manage their money due to learning the value of money and living better as adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 650, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to do'
Suggestion: to do
... and has limits. After that, they learn do not to ask for irrational requests from...
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Line 5, column 930, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
... month. Before the end of the month, he spend most of his money, and he did not have ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 183, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ng the value of money and living better as adults.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, so, well, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64113785558 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43525295052 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483588621444 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.950269191 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7619047619 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38095238095 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314758235149 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921854075774 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810889639106 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213089230688 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040336747315 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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