Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that money is integral part of human aspects and has huge financial potential. Some people argue that children should not be explore to financial responsible at earlier age. They cite it will be burden and stress for children to handle cash-related affairs to support their point. However, in my opinion, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that children should learn to administer the money at young age. I will support my view for two reasons.
To begin with, children who can mange financial obligation from earlier helps to make their life disciplined and far-less financial volatile. For instance, according to the survey conduct by one U.K university , it shows that the children who got all one month expenses at beginning at month makes them more handling of money in significant way which obviously more responsible. It is important to be a disciplined and far-less financial volatile because it helps person to stay clam in financial crisis and make people more mature to handle any circumstances. Thus, young children should aware to handle the money at young age.
Secondly, children should deal with monetary affairs at beginning of their life because it helps boost their efficient decision making power in future. For example, the children who get copious money, then definitely they spend recklessly at the early stage, but as scare of money at latter stage, they learn to how manage the money which proliferate the decision-making power of children in future. It is crucial to have efficient decision making process because it helps to person to take quick response to any kind of financial situation Therefore, it is pivotal to learn to manage the financial at a very young age.
To sum up, the issue of whether children should learn to handle the financial transaction is complex. Some suggested that it is not better for children to give such control of money at young age because children might feel anxiety and burden. Nevertheless, I still contend that and that children should be administer the financial transaction at early age and that they not only make them mature, self disciplined, but also enhances to increase decision making power.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, kind of, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07162534435 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68224600025 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476584022039 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0765119295 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.733333333 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298372747929 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126821184227 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661923408684 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210738401944 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356176576845 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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