Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Financial independency is a very important thing in anyone's life. There is no shortage of opinions that children should not allowed to manage their own finances. This make them more stubborn and disrespectful. I have a different opinion. I strongly believe that kids who manage their money at young age are more responsible and confident. In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons in support of giving money to children at young age so can learn managing it.
To begin with, the first exquisite point to be mentioned is that by managing finances in early age would be beneficial as it boost their confidence. Moreover, they feel more responsible. As a result, they may try their level best to not disappoint their elders because they don't want to lose their trust and image. To exemplify, When my uncle was twelve years old, his father assigned him fixed pocket money and from that he has to manage his expenses like giving gifts to his friends, or hanging out with his friends etc. Evidently, this habit helps him a lot when he grows up. He knows how to control his expenses wisely. On the other hand, his friends have to face many hardship regarding financial independent. Therefore, this example illustrates that kids should learn how to manage money at young age.
Secondly, to explain broadly, when kids made responsible for their finances at early age it gives them more margin of forgiveness. When we are young if we made mistakes, they not judged critically rather people helps to get us understand the mistake. Consequently, we learn more and prevent ourselves from any major loss. For instance, it is best explained by my own personal experience, when I was in elementary school of about 8 years, my father use to gave me monthly pocket money. I want to buy my dream princess bicycle for me and I am saving for that. Meanwhile, my friend gave me advice of buying lottery tickets so I may get instant money but it results in losing my saved money as I couldn't win. Thus, this experience taught me that we should invest our money instead of wasting it on lottery.
In conclusion, although some people believe that giving money to kids is detrimental and harm them by making them irresponsible and stubborn. I certainly believe that learning to manage finances at young age would be helpful and rewarding as this give them more sense of keeping balance in saving and spending. Also, make them more confident.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to manage
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78066037736 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6220210597 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540094339623 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.9407729217 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4583333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245537387504 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688289940765 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823353017806 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162288124221 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0957504838688 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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