Tpo15 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money at young age Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Tpo15:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Not many children seem to have their parents' trust when it comes to managing their own assets, especially time and money. Somehow I am grateful this was the case for the young me. Ever since I was a primary student, my parents have allowed me to have the control of my own things including money. I believe that was the key to growing into an adult who is financially responsible.

First of all, by having the permit to own and use money at a young age, children have the chance to grasp the concept of money and learn its value. Although practice of exchanging money bills on a daily basis can be confusing for young kids at first, this is exactly where they can learn how such "valuable pieces of paper" works. As children get accustomed to actually using money in real life, their understanding of money will be improved, which is also the rudimentary foundation from which children will get better in handling financial situations in the future. I have learned this fact from my own experience. When I was a first grader, my mom would give me an amount of allowance every day and I could decide how I wanted to spend it. At that time, I already know how to use money to buy my breakfast, yet it still felt fascinating to use money in my own way. After a year or so, I had learned the general prices of my daily purchases and could predict the prices of other similar items based on my little knowledge of finance. I am now confident whenever I purchase something since I have got the financial instinct inside me that have been built up for almost two decades.

Moreover, as naive as all children are, managing their own money feels like a stimulated family game in which they can actually learn to handle the amount of money they've got. When children are let independent with their budget, they tend to develop mental financial plans for how they want to use their money. This regular practice of saving and spending is like a workbook whose ultimate goal is to teach children to be responsible with every coin or bill they have. This reminds me so much of my old days. Every Lunar New Year, my friends and I would receive lucky money from our family and relatives. However, unlike my friends who had to give their lucky envelops to their parents because they thought kids couldn’t keep money, I was allowed to keep and do whatever I wanted with the money I had. Meanwhile my friends had no clue how much money they had received and what that amount of money could do, I had a whole vision of how my lucky money would be spent. I remember having a list of things I wanted to get and how much I had to save as well as how much lucky money would be allocated to each item. Now that I’m looking back, it is incredible how I have been able to do all that on my own ever since I was a little girl! Parents would never know how much their kids can learn through controlling their own budget.

All in all, although I am not sure if my old friends who were not allowed to take care of their own money have grown up to be responsible with their money now, I am sure children who are in charge of their own budget will become great managers of their own financial accounts. This is because through the use of money from the young age, they have gained so much experience as well as appreciation for each number of money they earn.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they've
...lly learn to handle the amount of money theyve got. When children are let independent ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 803, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...whatever I wanted with the money I had. Meanwhile my friends had no clue how much money t...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, well, while, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2728.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 621.0 407.700716846 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39291465378 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.991980728 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37177678293 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431561996779 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 857.7 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.958347133 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.608695652 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234246338685 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831908382807 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061278159702 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176160960861 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353923714708 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.48 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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