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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking Web sites.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the Internet develops, more and more young people have the opportunity to use a smartphone and connect with the world. Many parents state that because of the bunch of time young people spent on social media, video games and so on, it will be more difficult to educate them than before. However, as a college student, I think their concern was misplaced.
First, parents can make use of the Internet and cell phone to educate young people better than before. In order to educate children, parents should pay more time and accompany with students. However, because of the school issues, many young people would spend more time with their classmates and teachers in school than their parents. In this way, by using a cell phone and some social media parents can connect with their children and communicate with them any time and any places. For example, my university is away from my home; and my mother always shares me some educational essays and heuristic movies through social media, such as we chat and Twitter. My classmates told me they had similar experiences with me; we both thought cell phone and social media help us a lot to communicate with our parents and receive education as an effective tool.
Moreover, students can learn many new things and knowledge from cell phone and websites. We all know that people from different countries are connected by the Internet. Nowadays, young people can use the Internet to expand their horizon and make friends with peers around the world, and they definitely can learn a lot from them. They can use YouTube to see videos and vlogs taken by others, they can use iBook to read works in different languages, they can use ROTTEN TOMATOES to find their favorite movies. My sister Sally can speak three different second languages and she learned them by watching videos on YouTube in different languages and chat with native people in twitter.
Granted, it might be more difficult for the parents who are using the traditional way to educate their children, such as expand the knowledge or moral code mechanically. And also young people may get addicted to some video games more easily. However, parents can lead their children in a proper way and take advantage of the Internet.
In conclusion, educating children should not be a harder task today than past, for we have more efficient tools and more abundant source of information. As long as parents and young children use it wisely, internet and social network websites will help us to educate children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 5.04856512141 337% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 7.30242825607 370% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 30.3222958057 175% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1373.03311258 153% => OK
No of words: 428.0 270.72406181 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90420560748 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41171637726 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 145.348785872 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469626168224 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 419.366225166 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5167452814 49.2860985944 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.473684211 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5263157895 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10526315789 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0467668061155 0.272083759551 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0200123580484 0.0996497079465 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0136859310439 0.0662205650399 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0334924101156 0.162205337803 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.011031778704 0.0443174109184 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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