Older teenagers (16-19) should be allowed to work at paid part-time job or not.
Lots of high school students and undergraduates plan to take part in internships or paid part-time jobs during their weekends and vocation; however some parents are worried about that for they think teenagers are too young to interact with society. As long as I am concerned, internship should not be forbidden to adolescents at their age.
First of all, it is beneficial to find what you are good at and what kind of person you want to be, in the process of doing part-time job, for teenagers of this age. As we all know, adolescence is fueled by confusion and uncertainty, besides a pool of promising possibilities, and the only solution to this issue is how well we understand ourselves. Given various part-time jobs, the youth can know which one is their favorite by trying as many as they can. My father's experience is a case in point. When he was a 17-year-old boy, he was, just like other young people, at sea, but the difference between he and his peer is that he decided to go out of campus and do something different. He has tried more than 10 types of works and finally found out what he really keen on is to sell products to more and more costumer. After that he decided to become a successful and responsible business in the rest of his life.
Second, internship jobs offer teenagers not only salary for the first time in their life, more importantly, but also certain individual abilities,necessary to their future, such as communication ability, cooperation ability, and even financial ability. While we need to talk with others and organize activities as a normal student, internship working force us to talk to people from various degrees instead of classmates and faculties-that is we can learn to communicate with different people in proper ways. As for the cooperation ability, the youth only work or study together with their peers; rather, they must learn to work with the seniors in the company. Regarding the financial ability, after receiving the first salary in their life, students can know the worth of money and will learn to make use of it. Take myself as an example, when I was 18 years old, during the summer vacation after high school I wrote articles for a local newspaper. My wedge at that time was 10 dollars per day but my commute fee add meal fee was 5 dollar per day. After that I how precious money is and the difficulty to earn money.
Admittedly, abundant part-time jobs take up too much time and energy, which could be used for academic study and health development. Many friends of mine use almost 80% of their free days to work and even do not have time to have lunch. Some of them even were found stomach illness.However,this should not be a problem as long as we keep the balance between working and our life.
In conclusion, it is allowable that adolescents take paid part-jobs when they are free for it helps them to find out and improve themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, really, regarding, second, so, well, while, as for, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69667318982 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77738170497 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518590998043 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.470514179 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.55 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22721362898 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650496508303 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635456196163 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149969210895 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052930492776 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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