This is a challenging decision that what should children do when their parents are busy. In my opinion, this is very useful for both children and their parents to spend the time to have fun and playing games and sports. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, playing games and sports help students to strengthen their communications skills. Studies have shown that since children who play with others are in relationships with their peers more, they develop more sophisticated and progressed communication abilities and, this helps them in their future opportunities. For example, my brother used to stay at home and play with himself, but I preferred to go out and play with my friends. Because of these two different demeanors, we had a varied situation when we arrived at school. Since I had experienced collaborating and communicating with my peers, I was able to handle the first year of school very well. On the other hand, my brother had a lot of problems in communicating with others, and that made his hatred against the school. If he had communicated with his friends before school, he wouldn't have hated school at all.
Secondly, playing games and sports help children's health. Once children have physical activities, not only their physical health would be preserved but also, they won't suffer from mental diseases. My own experience is compelling evidence for this concept. As I mentioned my brother preferred to stay at our home and study than playing games and sports. Although my brother and I had the same food and the same situation in the home, I had better general health. He suffered from obesity; however, I was in fitness. Moreover, he had a tired spirit and was always unwilling to carry out his responsibilities. But, as my mother says, I possess a happy characteristic.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that children should spend their time playing games and sports because this helps them to extend their communication skills and because these practices improve their mental and physical general health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ated with his friends before school, he wouldnt have hated school at all. Secondly, pl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98285714286 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82518700844 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522857142857 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8185628379 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7894736842 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4210526316 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26315789474 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240187020175 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735072537046 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089580665201 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167400148491 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769571816711 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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