TPO44-Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer
Over the past few decades, the issue of whether parents should spend their free time on children's entretainments or their school duties has received a great deal of attention from parents and psychologists. Although some may argue that for the busy parents oversee of their child education should be priotrized, I as well as many others believe that parents who do not have much free time should spend it on amusing their children, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, a paramount reason why busy parents better spend their time on entertaining their children is that either playing games or sports could bring some closeness between them. This means that by having a enjoyful time, children could feel relief; therefore; their would have some memorable moments with their parents, which in turn could decrease their tension about their schoolworks and increase their confidence since they feel their parent right beside themselves during their pleasure time.
A furhther reason for this view is that in this electronic century children could help themselves during their school time. As the technoloogy evolves and the education system enhance, the problems of the children in their lessons would diminish due to the reason that they could have plenty number of resources for their homeworks. In addition, teachers are more concern about their students rather than previous time so they could help the children in their school problems as well as the parents. As a result, parents should not be worried about their children's school and have some enjoyful moments with them.
Finally, it is occasionally said that games or sports could fresh children's mind and develop their mental abilities. Also, it is sometimes said that parents who spend their time on playing with their offspring could consempate their lack of enough time for them. As a matter of fact children could perceive that although having a burst time, the parents spend their time on satisfying them; thus, they would think that they are important for their mothers and fat hers.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, I can draw the conclusion that it is better that busy parents spend their free time to amuse their children chiefly due to the reason that this decision not only much closes the parents with their children but also can fresh their spirit and their mind and improve their confidence as well.
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: many
... the reason that this decision not only much closes the parents with their children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in brief, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14249363868 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47857265199 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465648854962 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.4876142355 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.727272727 100.406767564 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.7272727273 20.6045352989 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4545454545 5.45110844103 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320690901554 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166554187777 0.076458572812 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602212382057 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223834361648 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415730675677 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 11.7677419355 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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