TPO 24-One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job
Over the past few decades, the issue of whether parents should persuade their children to have a part time¬job to prepare them for the future has recevied a great deal of attention from parents and psychologists. Although some may argue that children should have their childish time and should not invovle with adults' issues, I as well as many others believe that becoming familiar with part-time job could be beneficial for either their future career or responsiblity attitudes. I am of the opinion that both of these viewpoints have their own merits and drawbacks, and the following explanations will further elaborate in this perspective.
First and foremost, a paramount reason why parents courage their children to have a part-time job is that they can learn some skills which might be useful for their future occupation. In addition, It has been said that children who experience part-time job would percieve the value of the money more than others. This means that, juvenile who are received salary from their minor job would be more careful to spend their money due to the reason that they spend time and suffer to earn this money. For instance, my father had a part-time job in a store when he was a teenager. He could learn great tips in selling commodities and investment ans after some years he became a prosperous merchant in our city.
A further reason for this view is that young people should learn the responsiblity of their work as early as their teenage time due to the fact that their work could be more accurate since they should respond for their incorrect works. It is sometimes said that persuading children to select a part-time job not only make them to be a part of the society and become familiar with other jobs but also it might distract them to attract to some criminal activities and drugs. Take a juvenile who has a part-time job in a book store, being sorrounded by books and people who are interested in, he/she might encourage to reads more books in her/him free time.
Some psychologists, on the other hand, state that children and teeanges should not get invovle to adults situations since it might be stressful for them and harm their personality. Moreover, it is occasionally said that teenager should focus on their schools activities; then, a part-time job could be a distraction for them to having concenteration on their lessons.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, I can draw the conclusion that it is better for juvenile to have a part time job and parents should encourage them in this way chiefly due to learning new skills and being responsible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, moreover, so, then, well, for instance, in addition, in brief, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89910313901 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69699255228 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482062780269 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.2263099555 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.071428571 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8571428571 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365343286019 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14941385911 0.076458572812 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742946816892 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238624949643 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153905218332 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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