Nowadays, as the proliferation of the population, the stress in front of modern citizens is increasing. From my own perspective, my favorite means of entertainment is to stay alone. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.
First of all, in my view, the pressure mostly comes from the competition with others. The limited material resources contribute to the intense competition, which has been worsened by the great sum of population. It is the competition that makes life harder than ever. So I think the key to relaxing is to avoid competition, at least for a moment. My experience is a sad example of this. I come from China, where all of the students have to take a very cruel exam, which is always a challenge for Chinese students, before attending college. I felt pretty stressful during my high school years, since I had to spend 12 hours a day to reviewing my course-work. And we had a series of simulating tests, which seemed endless and made me nearly get depressed. However, I need to underline that my grades were pretty good, which made me rethink about the source of my pressure. The conclusion is clear: competitions and comparisons are pervasive among me and my classmates.
Secondly, although, undoubtedly, socialization makes up human-beings' essence, every person needs alone time. Because alone time is so important that it provides us a chance of introspection and of meeting unknown things in life. For example, Steven King, one of the most famous novelist in this era, prefers to lock himself in his small room when he's creating literature. The reason for this little weird behavior is that he holds an opinion that loneliness could stimulate his inspirations, which is of vital importance for writing jobs. Besides, the well-known Steven Jobs used to stay at home and watching movies all night when he felt tired because of the strict schedule.
In conclusion, I agree with the idea that the best way to get relaxed is to be alone. This is because avoiding pressure for a while could cut off the source of pressure. And because alone time is necessary for human-being.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, at least, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86813186813 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88991663583 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601648351648 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4881977524 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.380952381 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04761904762 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113301665187 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357440348812 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567170897941 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842030428878 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567732600032 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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