Undoubtedly, technology has improved our lives in several ways. Some people prefer to have a great access to the internet while others prefer to have an efficient public transportation. Both have positive aspects that people should consider in order to make a good choice. However, I personally believe that having a good internet access is weight better than having an improved means of transportation. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
First of all, the internet has been considered one of the most important advances in technology, it has enhanced education in some aspects such as sources of information. Therefore, it is necessary that students have a good access to this important tool. Due to improvements to the internet, these days adults may change their realities by providing their children of good education. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child my father used to tell me about his childhood, he used to claim that education was just for people who had the possibility to pay for it. Furthermore, he told me that even books were restricted, they were just for high social classes. Nowadays, this reality has changed; because of the internet, education has become more accessible. Even when I was a kid, I had access to little sources of information which make it possible to have better preparation in terms of education.
Secondly, another benefit that has been brought about by the internet is communication. Currently, there are different means of communication such as telephones or laptops which has changed the way in which people interact with others. Besides, it has made possible to connect people who lived relatively far away of each other. For instance, due to the internet, I can have the possibility to communicate with an academic advisor at the university that I will go to study in the Netherlands. Last week, I had a problem with one of my high school grades and it can affect the decision about my application. However, I could to have a chat with this person. Therefore, I could explain the situation and fixed the issue. All of this was possible because the internet provides people with the opportunity to establish imaginative networks of communication among people.
In conclusion, I strongly consider that governments should invest a great amount of money in improving the access to the internet because it does not only enhance our lives in terms of education, but also in terms of communication.
Undoubtedly, technology has improved our lives in several ways. Some people prefer to have a great access to the internet while others prefer to have an efficient public transportation. Both have positive aspects that people should consider in order to make a good choice. However, I personally believe that having a good internet access is weight better than having an improved means of transportation. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
First of all, the internet has been considered one of the most important advances in technology, it has enhanced education in some aspects such as sources of information. Therefore, it is necessary that students have a good access to this important tool. Due to improvements to the internet, these days adults may change their realities by providing their children of good education. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child my father used to tell me about his childhood, he used to claim that education was just for people who had the possibility to pay for it. Furthermore, he told me that even books were restricted, they were just for high social classes. Nowadays, this reality has changed; because of the internet, education has become more accessible. Even when I was a kid, I had access to little sources of information which make it possible to have better preparation in terms of education.
Secondly, another benefit that has been brought about by the internet is communication. Currently, there are different means of communication such as telephones or laptops which has changed the way in which people interact with others. Besides, it has made possible to connect people who lived relatively far away of each other. For instance, due to the internet, I can have the possibility to communicate with an academic advisor at the university that I will go to study in the Netherlands. Last week, I had a problem with one of my high school grades and it can affect the decision about my application. However, I could to have a chat with this person. Therefore, I could explain the situation and fixed the issue. All of this was possible because the internet provides people with the opportunity to establish imaginative networks of communication among people.
In conclusion, I strongly consider that governments should invest a great amount of money in improving the access to the internet because it does not only enhance our lives in terms of education, but also in terms of communication.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'great access'.
Suggestion: great access
...everal ways. Some people prefer to have a great access to the internet while others prefer to ...
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Line 2, column 218, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good access'.
Suggestion: good access
...ore, it is necessary that students have a good access to this important tool. Due to improvem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98337292162 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95912998312 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50593824228 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2208254667 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3636363636 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1363636364 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413280740512 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117976280953 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158910018936 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27981385815 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.256291897718 0.0645574589148 397% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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