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When a new technological device becomes available Some people buy it right away while others will wait until many have acquired it Which do you prefer

In today’s world technology has been evolving every day. Personally, I believe that waiting will be more beneficial for future than the buying new technological devices immadetly they have been relase into market. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, new digital widgets may have some flaws when their first time have introduced to the public. In that manner, they may need to reproduce or new improvements to fix those problems, therefore, people have to return those devices where they have bought. Those problems may cause plenty of problems for companies such as economic or loss of confidence, in conjunction with that also public may have to face so much trouble while they are waiting for solving those problems either. Therefore waiting for several months after they have been introduced will circumvent the living of those problems. My personal example is the best illustration of that. One time my phone broke, therefore, I needed to buy a device immediately to solve that problem. Also, I knew that one of the biggest technological devices’ producing companies have been served a new phone into market. In that manner, I went to one of the phone stores to buy it, I was not thinking that the new phone will have some flaws even though my father had warned me about it. However, after a few months, software problems started to appear on that phone, when I wanted to call someone, the phone would not allow me to call or I could not even manage my phone comfortably.
Secondly, sometimes when a new device comes out, all other technology companies are racing to produce the same level of device. Therefore if you wait after a new device comes out, maybe you can get a device with the same features or better from another brand for less or for the same money. For instance, when I was going to university I needed a new laptop for my classes because my old one was not providing so many things to meet my needs. Therefore I went to the store to buy a new one and I saw one of the laptops, which is providing what I need, have been just come up into market, however, first I wanted to do some price research in the market. In that manner, I had realized various opportunities provide the same quality. In conjuction with I made a list about them and made my decision depending on that list. Thanks to that list and research I found the perfect laptop for me and with the less price compare with the first laptop that I have seen.
To conclude, I strongly feel that waiting for a while after a new device comes out can offer more opportunities than buying it outright. This is because those devices may have some wrongs such as software problems and also if you wait enough time or do market research before buying it, you can have find a better option.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 490, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ng to produce the same level of device. Therefore if you wait after a new device comes ou...
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Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...viding so many things to meet my needs. Therefore I went to the store to buy a new one an...
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Line 4, column 301, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
...research before buying it, you can have find a better option.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59405940594 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47648761015 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449504950495 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3510554157 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.476190476 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0476190476 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277950596212 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08762738063 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601977944539 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193527713671 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285201100841 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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