When people grow up, they have to choose between living independently as soon as possible or living with their families for a longer time. Which one do you prefer and why?
When a person reaches adulthood, he comes to face one of the most important decisions in life: whether to start living on his own right away, or continue staying with his family for a few more years. Despite the huge prejudice that a grown-up man living with parents is useless and shameful, I personally think that it is a wise choice not to move out immediately. My firm belief is due to the fact that at a young age, a person still lacks of money and experience to begin a new life by himself.
Financial problem is the first and foremost difference at the turning point of life. During childhood and teenage years, our life was just about school and friends, but had nothing to do with money. However, when we grow up, money turns out to be the driving force of every aspect of life, and the economic burden begins to weigh on the shoulders of whom live alone. My experience is a compelling example of this. I used to spend a lot of time hanging out with peers in luxurious coffee shops when I was in high school. Everything changes since I studied abroad and started working part-time to pay daily cost. I have to work 4 hours per day, 7 days a week, and gets home around 1 o’clock in the morning. Though I feel exhausted, I do not have any other choice but work for my living.
Lack of experiences is also a reason why I think it is too early for an 18 – year – old person to start off a new chapter of life. Living alone requires us to handle all trouble on our own, from cooking to cleaning, from preventing pregnancy to dealing with depression. Imagine a naïve girl has just left parents’ loving arms and encountered a bad guy, in the moment of being betrayed, she could make any foolish decision that would cost a high price in the future. While it is indisputable that we all end up tackle our tragedy by ourselves, I believe the lost and regret can be reduced by talking to our parents so that we never have to face it alone. At the beginning of adulthood, parents’ experiences and advice are definitely great channels to help us prepare for our next period of life – when we are ready to be independent.
In light of the reasons above, I am of the opinion that we should live with family until we gain enough budget and knowledge to survive on our own two feet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
When a person reaches adulthood, he come...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, while, i feel, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38551401869 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51657532511 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588785046729 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.9868877475 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.411764706 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1764705882 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18555937713 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545973875971 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430471808974 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113798905895 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300854887717 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.48 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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