Nowadays, Some may hold the opinion that the successful people are also considered lucky, but other believe the opposite. As far as I’m concerned, I agree with the statement above. There are numerous reasons why I hold such an attitude. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
First of all, Considering education as one of the most important key factors of success, to be admitted by university and being able to graduate from licence degree with mere luck is just sounds imaginary. Graduating is the first step of the success and if someone’s is not enough educated and indolent will be eliminated at the first step. Since there are many graduated people around, it’s hard to be capture attention. So individual must advance their education and improve themselves. These steps are nothing to do with luck, it’s just hard work. Even if someone qualify for a good position at a company by luck, due to lacking knowledge,he will be asked to resign soon.
Secondly, There are also many uneducated person which are successful in commercial areas. As the saying goes “The ladder of success is best climbed by stepping on the rungs of oppurtinity”. .In my country there are many businessman who comes from poverty to top. They are all determined persons,working for years to deserve that place. Ones who waits for the oppurtiny to knock their doors will always complain about how unlucky they are.
In a word, As long as someone determine his goals and dreams, he’ll work hard to to reach that goals step by step. Ability to turn your dreams into reality is called success and This is nothing to do with luck.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'qualifies'.
Suggestion: qualifies
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Suggestion: , he
...ompany by luck, due to lacking knowledge,he will be asked to resign soon. Second...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'people', 'persons'?
Suggestion: people; persons
...econdly, There are also many uneducated person which are successful in commercial area...
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Suggestion: .
...ping on the rungs of oppurtinity'. .In my country there are many businessman...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ing on the rungs of oppurtinity'. .In my country there are many businessman w...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun businessman seems to be countable; consider using: 'many businessmen'.
Suggestion: many businessmen
...rtinity'. .In my country there are many businessman who comes from poverty to top. They are...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'businessmen'?
Suggestion: businessmen
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , working
... to top. They are all determined persons,working for years to deserve that place. Ones w...
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Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'determines'.
Suggestion: determines
...y are. In a word, As long as someone determine his goals and dreams, he'll work h...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
... goals and dreams, he'll work hard to to reach that goals step by step. Ability ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 279.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97132616487 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74454627736 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627240143369 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4377453259 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5882352941 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58823529412 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240265048296 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788532400304 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096995117535 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144178702528 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606089492941 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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