when there is a new technological device available, some people will buy it immediately, while others will wait until many others have adopted it. Which view do you agree more.

We are living in a world full of splendours and technology is one of the brightest. Tremendous amount technological devices make it possible that we can use the technology and even hold them in hands. Those devices, equipped with the most advanced technology, attracts so many people that they will make purchase once the devices release. However, from my own experience, I prefer to buy the new deices until many others have adopted it.

First and foremost, the first orders of the new devices are not stable and reliable enough to support the new functions. Usually, after the release, the vendors of the new device will need some time to test and adjust the device and their production lines to ensure the reliability. However, some vendors will shortened the time for testing and adjustment and have the customers play that role. Therefore, the initial devices are likely to have defects. For instance, I bought a mobile phone last year after the release immediately. There were some defects on the screen and I had to pay for the shipment for the repair.

Moreover, the merchants are likely to exaggerate the new functions or the quality of new device to attract people. However, some functions are not practical or meaningful. For example, a mobile phone company released a smart watch with limited battery capacity so if you want to use that watch, you have to take a cable and portable charge with you and check the battery condition frequently. Some customers complained that the watch could only last for several hours so providing time or other additional information is impossible. Producing a low battery watch is anything but practical. Therefore, we need to evaluate the functions of new devices meticulously for some time.

Last but not the least, even though one new device is reliable and utilitarian, I would also like to wait for a while because other similar products will come out later. In this way, I can select a cheaper device and experience the quality and new functions at the same time. Last year, some bands were released and most of them could detect the heart beat and count steps. For me, I only concentrated on those two functions. So I waited for twenty days, compared several new devices, and finally selected the cheaper one. Not only did I saved money, but also I pick the suitable one.

In conclusion, I will wait for couple of weeks until the quality of the new products is stable, the functions are reliable. In addition, I can also make comparison between similar devices.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'shorten'
Suggestion: shorten
...reliability. However, some vendors will shortened the time for testing and adjustment and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87674418605 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61121370113 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493023255814 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2997234275 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.375 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9166666667 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286124344012 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755008529719 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645711357658 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162432100488 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544757540793 0.0645574589148 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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