Charities and organizations which gather money to assess people who are homeless or poor play an indispensable role in society because they supply different basic facilities that are necessary for underprivileged people to live. An inevitable question which has always been a topic of contention and brought about heated debates is whether you should decide how your donation will be used or leave the decision to the charitable organizations. A plethora of people adhere to the belief that it is better themselves choose how the money they donate to charities be used, which I entirely disagree. As far as I am concerned, I believe that people should leave this decision to charity organizations. In the following, I will elucidate my rationale by advancing two reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mention is that evidently, organizations, which are working as charities have much more knowledge and information than normal people to assist the people who need help. Therefore, these organizations can do more efficiently and effectively in order to lead the donated money. As a proof to these points, a cutting-edge and comprehensible investigation undertaken by a number of eminent researchers in the University of London demonstrated that people who have not any enough experience to assist the poor people would waste the donated money on items that are not essential to provide an efficacious assistance. This evidence indicates that it is better to pay money to charitable organizations in order to support people who need it.
Second, deciding to choose how the donated money will be spend could be very time consuming. Aiding other people need an enormous amount of time, but in this sophisticated and fast-paced world, people are busy with their jobs and families, and have not enough time for these activities. As a result, charitable organizations provide a splendid opportunity for people to help others without spending their worthwhile time. My own experience is a compelling evidence of this reality. Two years ago, when I was in university, I had been helping trying to help homeless people around my neighborhood, but I had to sacrifice my precious time, as result, I had insufficient time to study, and my grades were getting low. Had I payed for charities to decide how to help the poor, I would have had more time to study.
In brief, all aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that it is more thoughtful to let charitable organizations decide how they could help people who need help. This is because they have more experience in supporting activities, and because it would be so time consuming to find out what is the most effective way to help others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08968609865 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06304616432 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488789237668 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.4554199708 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.529411765 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2352941176 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256047626401 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945571626457 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757791222773 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159978886323 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656971308022 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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