young people enjoy life more than older people do

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that there is a lot of social, cultural, psychological and physiological reasons that young people have more enthusiastic to enjoy a happy life. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that this is a complete misunderstanding that older ones lower enjoy life, even some of them spend more time for happiness than young people do. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that young people enjoy life more than older people do.

First and foremost, there are some misbeliefs about human age and some sets of specific behaviors that society expected from people of older ages. For example, my grandmother was a successful athlete in the past. Now she has 80 years old, but she still has a healthy and strong body. Nonetheless, when I asked her to went with me to a mountain climbing trip, she refused. The reason for her decision was just other people judgment about her. Simply, she afraid of her friends' reaction to her work, because these kinds of hobbies are not acceptable in our culture during old ages.

Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that young people have more time for entertainments. Most people between the ages of 20 to 30 are still single. Whereby, they are not responsible for any other person. Nevertheless, married people should spend most of their time with their family, for example, caring children and cleaning house that maybe are not very enjoyable for anyone. Moreover, parents should work so hard to provide enough financial support for their children.

Finally, yet importantly, older people have lesser eager and courage to take risks. For example, it is very interesting for me to spend even the whole of my saved money to travel to my favorite country. However, an older person never does this. They believe that this is a crazy decision. Most older people prefer to have enough money deposited in the bank for some unexpected happens. They avoid any threatened for example participating in roller-skate play even they previously really enjoy it.

On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that young people enjoy life more than older ones.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: HAVE_CD_YEARS[1]
Message: This phrase is used with 'be': 'is 80 years old'.
Suggestion: is 80 years old
...successful athlete in the past. Now she has 80 years old, but she still has a healthy and strong...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: I_AFRAID[3]
Message: You miss the verb here. You should rather write: 'she's afraid'.
Suggestion: she's afraid
...ther people judgment about her. Simply, she afraid of her friends reaction to her work, be...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 290, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'Most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: Older
... believe that this is a crazy decision. Most older people prefer to have enough money depo...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, still, thus, even so, for example, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98648648649 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59693728697 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562162162162 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.6015364327 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8571428571 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.619047619 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448678558706 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137147994401 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177014832922 0.0737576698707 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299544162512 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.215205339939 0.0645574589148 333% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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