Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities (not mine)
Since the dawn of the civilization, people has been trying to develop and improve their community. In addition, no one can deny the fact that our community is crucial and beneficial factor for our further existence. however, there has been a long-standing discussion whether youth care enough for their environment or not. some may hold the view that today's young generations spend to much time caring for the community, while, some others take the opposite viewpoint. Personally, I believe that today young people spend more time in improving their environment. In the following essay, I will elaborate on my standpoint through two reasonable pieces of evidence.
The first point to mentioned is that today youth, through using intelligent appliances, are more aware about the things that harm our society. In addition, people can be easily informed about air pollution or global warming today. For example, I have a friend who made a mobile application which measures air pollution's level in particular environment. through using this application, many young people became aware about one od the majors problems in today's society, and moreover this example motivated many further young people to make intelligent appliances, using today's sophisticated technology, against many problem in our community.
Another reason worth saying is today's convenient and cheapest flights. I believe that youth have more opportunities and chances to travel around the word today. Like a consequence, today's young people have chance to find about the newest modern inventions which can make out community more convenient. For instance, through travelling outside the country youth can realized how powerful and useful could be underground traffic. Stating reasons about the advances from this type of traffic, the youth can make different efforts this beneficial traffic to come into force. In addition, the air pollution, a traffic jam and a stressful life could be past for the future generations.
To sum up briefly, one can dedicate that today's young people spend more time helping their communities due to the rapid growth of technology and convenient flights. however, there are things to be said that will challenge the points I made in above paragraph. All in all, further research is needed to more accurately assess the merit of the points I argued.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in particular, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33602150538 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78237493911 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545698924731 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3794711174 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.473684211 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170869256624 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547173645599 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752923652924 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11669150078 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625834578611 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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