Nowadays, with increasing world complexity, many people believe that young individuals prefer not to spend enough time on helping their society. Although youth do several beneficial things for their communities, I, personally, believe that it is not enough concentration due to several conspicuous reasons which will be elaborated as follows.
To begin with, Youth do not have enough time, to spend it on others. As young people's income is lower than the elderly ones, they have to spend more time on their job, which has a direct influence on their leisure time. Therefore, they even do not have enough time for resting. An example can drive this notion dramatically home. My mom retired one year ago. As can be revealed, her lifestyle has completely changed after retirement. Now she can easily spend a lot of time on charities and poor people. However, she did not use to give that much time to help for society when she was young. Accordingly, youth do not give enough time on societies, for their time occupies with a lot of projects.
Moreover, often elderly people have more efficient power. It is crystal clear that youth do not have enough experience to guide and help societies’ promotion in the correct way. Therefore, they cannot have a noticeable effect on communities as they should listen and learn from their elderlies.
In conclusion, I, totally, accept that youth do not pay enough attention to their societies. I believe that it is because of the fact that they have to work harder to get promotion on their job and earn money. Also, as they do not have beneficial experiences, they do not have any power to be efficient. The two previous paragraphs described my viewpoint in detail.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94809688581 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73139504858 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550173010381 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8585711878 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.4444444444 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0555555556 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409006409012 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122316200385 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100679498368 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24141810694 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894479403502 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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