Nowadays, governments are in a competition to develop their country. In this complex situation, many of these governments are in a dilemma whether spending money on the education of young children or university students. In this regard, I totally believe that concentrating the more proportion of the educational budget on academic youths has more benefit than young children.
Firstly, it is not acceptable for academic youths to spend more money on young children education rather than them. It is crystal clear that all children in a society are not talented but a high percentage of academic youths are both talented and hard-working in a specific major. University students have mature creativity and require proper equipment to research on a specific field. Therefore, a government should provide laboratories, facilities, and knowledgeable professors to guide them in a correct way. Otherwise, this condition causes a phenomenon, named “brain drain.” Brain drain calls to a situation which intelligent youths think that their government does not pay enough attention to them to run their ideas for developing their countries and other countries get benefit from this condition by trying to absorb these individuals. If the government spend money on university students, the rank of the university increases, which consequently, enhances the rate of attracted knowledgeable people from other parts of the world to their country.
Secondly, today's youth are future parents. Most individuals who accepted to qualified universities are in the age between 18 and 30. They will be the parents of future generation in a country, and can indirectly affect the society from two aspects. Firstly, young children can see the impact of education on each individual’s life and imitate their lifestyle. Secondly, university students persuade their own children to study harder and also support them to be more innovative than their selves. It can reveal easily that in developed countries the proportion of educated parents who pay attention to their children’s education are more than those parents who are not educated. It is because of the fact that they have experienced, and it is easy for them to recommend correct ways. Therefore, focusing on university students not only do the next generation promote but also have a positive impact on the whole society.
In conclusion, spending more proportion of money on university students have a better impact on the countries’ development, for academic universities are more creative and innovative. Also, they are the parents of the future generation of a society who can advertise the society to choose the best way for developing the country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a correct way" with adverb for "correct"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... knowledgeable professors to guide them in a correct way. Otherwise, this condition causes a phe...
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Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...ose parents who are not educated. It is because of the fact that they have experienced, and it is easy f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, in conclusion, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43971631206 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12469817577 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472813238771 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1011149373 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.105263158 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2631578947 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238506369805 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836766453666 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819501951743 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18234960286 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540646840661 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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