Your city has decided to build statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose? Use reasons specific examples to support your answer.

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Your city has decided to build statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose? Use reasons specific examples to support your answer.

I will choose Kei Nishikori. He changed the world, he gave us the future, and he made a big history.

Firstly, Kei Nishikori is a famous tennis player in Japan and around the world. Last year, he won the second place in the US-Open. It is a tennis competition that they open in New-York-City every year. He is the first person in Asia, who went to the final. I watched it early in the morning. I was very sleepy, but the match was amazing, because he changed the world. For example, I watched a news a few months ago. More people started to play tennis, when they saw Kei Nishikori was very close to the winning. He affected them in a good way to spread the tennis.

Secondly, he gave the future to everyone. For example, when I was doing Track-and-Field. I am a long distance runner, and I am practicing it every week. Many people are older, and faster than me. I thought running is not suitable for me. However, I realized that I have to try my best and practice everyday. I think the other people have gave up, when they could not win. He made us notice that making an effort is very essential for us.

Thirdly, he made a history. His previous world rank was very low. However, he is in fifth place now. I think his evolution is bigger than the other players. This is the one of the reasons, why he is famous. The most of the statues are representing of famous or popuar people. Since many people are inspiring him, they will agree in making a staue of him for honoring him.

These are my three specific reasons, why I will choose Kei Nishikori, when the city decided to make a monument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...that I have to try my best and practice everyday. I think the other people have gave up,...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: GAVE_GIVE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
...everyday. I think the other people have gave up, when they could not win. He made us...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...everyday. I think the other people have gave up, when they could not win. He made us...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 52.1666666667 42% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36120401338 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43970247905 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528428093645 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.7227435144 48.9658058833 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 48.2962962963 100.406767564 48% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.0740740741 20.6045352989 54% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.40740740741 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 19.0 4.88709677419 389% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0626368861366 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0181001984018 0.076458572812 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344701861206 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0501192746226 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486728235661 0.0645574589148 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.6 11.7677419355 39% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.82 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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