Nowadays, education has become the top concern of modern citizens. Recently, there is a heated debate on the university's investment to improve students' life quality, some claim that the university should spend money on studying rooms or fitting rooms. As for me, I believe that they should spend money on providing an entertainment place, especially considering the benefits to people's health and interpersonal relationship.
Firstly, building an amusement room will boot students to have a healthy lifestyle. To be specific, students are very stressed out these days, having a room like that can provide them a place to take a break from school assignments, which can help them have a metal relaxation relaxing. My friend Mike is a compelling illustration of this. Mike spends at least 10 hours a day at school attending class, preparing for exams, and doing group work, which makes him exhausted every day. After returning to the dormitory, he just wants to have some fun, like watching movies, playing video games with friends, and going for a walk. If we have a recreation entertainment room in the dorm, we will definitely have a better mental condition and re-engage in our studies; however, if the university invests in studying rooms, we cannot have this kind of leisure time. In addition, students can study at libraries, which is more suitable for studying. There is no need to build a room for study in our dorm. Thus, I am convinced that the university should provide an entertainment room.
Furthermore, if the playroom is built, students can also have the opportunity to improve their interpersonal skills by making good friends in it. To be exact, people can easily find someone with the same interests, such as adoring the same sports, celebrities, films, and books. For instance, a place like that will provide students a chance to expand their friend circle, it also gives some shy people an opportunity to take the first step to make some friends. As I know, the college next door builds amusement rooms in students' dorms, which greatly enhance students' social abilities. A student who used to be afraid of talking with others sends a think letter to the office because this helps him to make his first friend in his life. On the other hand, how could students have a chance to meet new people and improve their interpersonal relationships, if the university chooses exercise rooms.
In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, I still maintain that the university should spend money providing an entertainment place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 649, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... be afraid of talking with others sends a think letter to the office because this helps...
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Line 5, column 883, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to exercise'
Suggestion: to exercise
...elationships, if the university chooses exercise rooms. In conclusion, from what has ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, still, thus, as for, at least, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05450236967 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80183084053 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563981042654 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0976332094 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.263157895 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373094864484 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116707088052 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848346076311 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241871130609 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453794545236 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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