AIDS is a disease that has killed millions of people all over the world. Most of the cases of AIDS in the world are in poorer countries where the people can’t afford to buy the drugs that would help keep them alive and healthy. Many AIDS Advocacy Groups

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AIDS is a disease that has killed millions of people all over the world. Most of the cases of AIDS in the world are in poorer countries where the people can’t afford to buy the drugs that would help keep them alive and healthy. Many AIDS Advocacy Groups (AAGs) are trying to help the people in these developing countries get the health care they need to fight AIDS. AAGs are doing this in several ways.

First of all, they argue that the profits of these companies are too high and such high pricing is immoral in the face of such a devastating disease. AAGs believe that major drug companies should sell their AIDS medicines at a much lower cost so that AIDS patients who have very little money would not have to choose between buying their food or their medication.

Second, AAGs are trying to get governments to pay for AIDS drugs instead of individual people. In general, when buying in large quantities, the price goes down. Therefore, if a government bought enough medication for all the AIDS patients in its country, then the price per bottle of medication would be much lower than the price individuals currently pay when buying medication on their own.

Third, AAGs are beginning to encourage poor countries to make their own cheap versions of AIDS drugs, even though it is illegal to do so. If the drugs were made in the same country, this would not only reduce shipping costs, but it would also give many people jobs in these poorer countries.

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The reading and the lecture are both talking about how to provide AIDS drug in the low-income country, which is very complicated and troublesome. The author of the reading believes that the AIDS drugs should be cheaper so the patients could afford them moreover the AIDS Advocacy Group (AAG) believe the pharmaceutical company and government should take apart of it. The lecturer casts doubt on the suggestion made in the article. He thinks that the advice is shortsighted and not feasible to apply.

First, AAG suggests the drug company to lower the drugs price by cut the company profit. It is mention that it is unethical for the business owner to utilize poor people for their benefit. This point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that substantial for every business, the company needs profit to survive. Without the profit, there will be no investor hence no budget to recreate a new drug.

Secondly, the author contends that the government should pay the drugs. If the government buy the drugs in large quantities, the price will decrease hence the patient can get the drugs. The lecturer rebuts this argument. He stated that the government of poor country most likely unable to fund the huge expenses since the government also has very limited expenditure. She elaborates on this by mentioning that it is an economic basic that poor country has a poor government.

Finally, the organization encourages the poorly resourced countries to create their own version of AIDS drugs. The article establishes that without shipping cost and increase job opportunities thus the price will go lower and the people have more buying power. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that this idea will not only consider unethical, because it is stealing the pharmaceutical company trademark, but also it is dangerous. The lower price may happen because of the use of cheap material and low-quality control. It could put the patient at substantial risk.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (AAG) must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...em moreover the AIDS Advocacy Group AAG believe the pharmaceutical company and governme...
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Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: APART_A_PART[2]
Message: Wrong collocation. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: apart from
...ical company and government should take apart of it. The lecturer casts doubt on the sug...
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Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...and government should take apart of it. The lecturer casts doubt on the suggestion ...
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Line 7, column 438, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ny trademark, but also it is dangerous. The lower price may happen because of the u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, talking about, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 323.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06191950464 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69151202507 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 145.348785872 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554179566563 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6420328071 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0526315789 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 7.06452816374 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 4.45695364238 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149387303347 0.272083759551 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354000621838 0.0996497079465 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470881906611 0.0662205650399 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863720748882 0.162205337803 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046604223761 0.0443174109184 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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