Although the sale of rhinoceros horns is illegal worldwide, rhinoceroses (Rhinos) are commonly poached (hunted illegally) for their horns, which can be sold for tens of thousands of dollars per kilogram. Rhino horns are so valuable that one type of rhino is already extinct because poachers killed too many of them. All rhinos may soon become extinct unless something is done to help save them. Several ideas have been suggested
The first idea is for wildlife experts to “dehorn" Rhinos living in the wild. Dehorning means removing the horns of living rhinos to make them less attractive to poachers Horns can be removed without hurting the animals if medical equipment and drugs to calm the animals are used When this strategy was tried on a small scale in the early 1990s; none of the rhinos dehorned at the time were killed by poachers.
The second possibility is to educate consumers. The majority of rhino horn sold is used in medicines Although rhino horn is believed to have health benefits, this belief has no scientific foundation Rhino horn consists almost entirely of keratin, the same material found in human hair and nails. Keratin has no known health value. Educating consumers about keratin could greatly decrease the demand for rhino horn
The third possibility is to legalize government sales of rhino horn. Some governments have large amounts of horn, taken from poachers they have arrested This horn is often kept in storage. However, if government sales were legal, large quantities of horn that governments already have could be sold at very low prices Poachers kill rhinos because consumers pay high prices for their horns If governments started selling cheap rhino horn, rhino poaching would no longer be profitable and would probably stop, at least for a while. That might help endangered rhino populations to recover.
According to the passage, Rhinoceroses are becoming extinct because they are hunted by poachers to sell them. This case is led many Rhinos to extinct. Several ideas are mentioned in the passage to save Rhinos, but the professor explained in the lecture that those several ideas have a weakness for some reasons below.
First, dehorning Rhinos is not practical because Rhinos will need to prepare for surgery then their horn removes. Rhinos use their horns to dig water, getting food, and protect, so they will be disadvantaged by removing their horns.
Second, the Horns are beneficial for health? This belief is much ancient, and decreasing demands for horns by educating might not work because this belief is so strong and old in minds.
Third, the legalization of the sales of the Rhinos horn will not work. Many people do not buy the horns because it is illegal. When it becomes legal, people will want to buy them, so by increasing demand, the horn's price will increase. As a result, poachers will hunt Rhinos more to sell and get benefits.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, so, then, third, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 12.0772626932 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 870.0 1373.03311258 63% => OK
No of words: 179.0 270.72406181 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86033519553 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 4.04702891845 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4122954192 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 145.348785872 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59217877095 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 419.366225166 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0752611387 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0909090909 110.228320801 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2727272727 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36363636364 7.06452816374 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317078508015 0.272083759551 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133077264933 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769948476148 0.0662205650399 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189583186297 0.162205337803 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789514523526 0.0443174109184 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.3589403974 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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