Altruism
The lecture completely refutes the passage. It is said in the lecture that, the perceived acts of altruism are nothing more than sneaky methods of gaining advantage for one's self.Contrary to the belief in the passage that sentinels risk their lives for the cause of the whole group, the professor says that the meerkat sentinels are in fact less prone to outside threats. The alarm sentinels give off causes to group to move rashly which draws the predators attention towards them, thus drawing away the attention from the sentinels. The lecture refutes the fact that these meerkats are altruistic in the sense that they gain nothing in exchange of their services. In fact, researches have shown that they have a full stomach as they perform this "altruistic" duty and have a better chance of escaping from danger because they witness it ifrst Proffesor also offers a different underlying motivation that causes people to believe that acts such as donating an organ or sharing food with someone in need are altruistic. She says that people gain appreciation as a result of such acts, which may be deemed by some much more important than materialistic gains.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...sneaky methods of gaining advantage for ones self.Contrary to the belief in the pass...
^^^^
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Contrary
...hods of gaining advantage for ones self.Contrary to the belief in the passage that senti...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'grouping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: grouping
...ts. The alarm sentinels give off causes to group to move rashly which draws the predator...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 449, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'predators'' or 'predator's'?
Suggestion: predators'; predator's
...to group to move rashly which draws the predators attention towards them, thus drawing aw...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 974.0 1373.03311258 71% => OK
No of words: 194.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0206185567 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77499654107 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628865979381 0.540411800872 116% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 419.366225166 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 21.2450331126 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.557131974 49.2860985944 230% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.333333333 110.228320801 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3333333333 21.698381199 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0479147786081 0.272083759551 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.018866694214 0.0996497079465 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421872107732 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0479147786081 0.162205337803 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.3589403974 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 53.8541721854 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 63.6247240618 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.498013245 141% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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