Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice. There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system. Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring planet, Mars, some t

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Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice. There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system. Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring planet, Mars, some think that sending people to an asteroid would actually be the best colonization option for a number of reasons

In this set of materials, the author of the reading passage expresses three advantages of establishing colonies of humans to live and work on an asteroid. However, the professor thinks that the author’s reasons contain some defects.
First of all, the author states that asteroids have lower gravity, so it makes the spaceship land safer than landing on the Moon or Mars. On the contrary, the professor indicates that the low gravity presents some risks for the human. In the low gravity circumstance, human will lose muscles and lose bone density. It already happened when astronauts stay in the spacecraft, not to mention the long-term, what will influence the people.
In addition, the author claims that because some asteroids have valuable elements such as gold and platinum, by sending them back to Earth, it would pay for the colonists cost. However, the professor asserts that there is some additional cost such as transportation. Furthermore, it no guarantees that the elements still remain the same price. The reason is that if the supplies of the elements increase, It would lower the element’s market price. Therefore, there is not profitable for sending these elements back to Earth.
Finally, the author raises the point that some of the asteroids are easy to reach. Unlike Mars, it would require a two-year trip in each direction. Asteroids would be much easier and more affordable to get to and get back. On the other hand, the professor refutes the author’s idea by saying that it is easy to reach asteroids; however, to return it would be a challenge, due to asteroids’ orbit are unusual. Some asteroids may close to the earth, then one point, they may move away from Earth and travel the great distance. Hence, there would be a challenge for the colonist to travel back to Earth that far.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 43, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...nally, the author raises the point that some of the asteroids are easy to reach. Unlike Mar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, in addition, such as, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 305.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00327868852 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75616628064 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550819672131 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3661394006 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7647058824 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9411764706 21.698381199 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132334369127 0.272083759551 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424622624826 0.0996497079465 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422373342924 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874379751992 0.162205337803 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384884712214 0.0443174109184 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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