Humans have long been fascinated by elephants, the largest land animal in the modern world. Social animals that live in herds, elephants are native to both Africa and Asia. Their large ears, long trunk, and long life span have made elephants one of the most captivating creatures on Earth. Our long-standing interest in elephants has led to several beliefs about surprising elephant behaviors.
Elephants Are Aware of Approaching Death
One of the popular beliefs is that when elephants become old and weak, they know that they are nearing the end of their lives. They demonstrate this by breaking away from their herds and going off alone to certain locations often found near bodies of water—so called “elephant graveyards”—to die alone. The idea that old elephants seem aware that they will die soon is supported by the discovery of many sites containing bones exclusively of elderly elephants.
Representing Objects through Art
Additionally, elephants seem to have artistic ability. Elephants can be taught to hold a paintbrush in their trunk and use it to paint on a canvas. Some elephants have been known to paint drawings that represent recognizable things: flowers, other elephants, even themselves. This talent makes elephants the only animal other than humans to produce art representing the world around them.
Fear of Mice
Finally, it has long been believed that elephants have a fear of mice. In 77 C.E., the Roman philosopher and scientist Pliny the Elder wrote that elephants are more afraid of mice, small mammals that can do elephants no harm, than of the much more dangerous animals with which elephants normally share an environment, such as lions or tigers. In a recent scientific experiment in which a herd of elephants was confronted with several mice, the elephants backed away from the mice and left the area to avoid them.
The topic discusses several beliefs about surprising elephant behaviors, and the author presents three kinds of beliefs. Nonetheless, the writer's statement of beliefs encounters serious dissensions from the professor, and she introduces counterarguments.
First, the writer declares that elephants know that they are at the end of their lives, so they will leave the group to certain locations called "elephant graveyards" to die alone. By contrast, the professor disclaims this argument and holds that it is impractical that elephants' teeth will become too weak to bite the rigid things, so they leave the group to find softer leaves to eat. Moreover, softer leaves are usually found near the water so that people will misunderstand.
Second, the writer asserts that elephants have artistic ability, holding a paintbrush to paint on a canvas, and also they can draw some recognizable things such as flowers and other elephants. On the contrary, this seemingly plausible statement is critically rebuked by the professor's account from a conflicting angle that elephants are only forced to do the painting behavior. It is because the trainer will stroke elephants' ears which are sensitive, and they only repeatedly paint the lines.
Lastly, the writer argues that elephants are afraid of mice, and when they notice several mice, they will leave the area to avoid facing them. However, the professor stands in stark opposition to this statement by pointing out that elephants are unfamiliar to mice, and it is only their natural instinct. In addition, we can observe that the elephant which lives in the zoo will not fear mice, because they are familiar with mice and realize that mice don't threaten to them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...hree kinds of beliefs. Nonetheless, the writers statement of beliefs encounters serious...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...amiliar with mice and realize that mice dont threaten to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, lastly, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, in addition, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 274.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27372262774 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80876111583 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569343065693 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.51434878587 396% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3427140726 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.363636364 110.228320801 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9090909091 21.698381199 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133425108812 0.272083759551 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056251886681 0.0996497079465 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312269548727 0.0662205650399 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805128939489 0.162205337803 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257656427929 0.0443174109184 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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