Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every mass media jostle to report news of entertainers and athletes to enhance the attention to their news. Thus, we can often find that many of them complain or denounce the media on their Facebook or Instagram to convey their discontent. This issue also causes many discussions and comes into focus. In my view, they indeed need more privacy. More perspectives and proof will be shed light in the following.
First and foremost, those athletes and entertainers are ordinary people, who also value privacy. We can put ourselves in their place that all of us are not willing to let the public know the detail of our daily life, and so do these celebrities. For instance, we have no intention to open our schedule when to go to work or have a vacation. Similarly, those celebrities would not like to divulge their next destination or place because of the anxiety about innumerable fans bothering them when they are having dinner with family or attending a music concert. Moreover, the significance of privacy recently has been emphasized by people, so we should give these celebrities the same standard of owning privacy.
In addition, pressure from continuing to stay in front of many magnifiers and cameras has a detrimental effect on these celebrities’ mental health. It is because no matter what behaviors are made by these celebrities, everything may be amplified and misinterpreted easily since it is haters themselves who are trying to troll. Long-term investigating and viewing, there must produce substantial intangible stress, which sometimes even cause an irreversible tragedy. An unfortunate example can be given to illustrate. There are some mournful incidents of entertainer’s suicide in South Korea or even the whole world every year and a large percentage of these result from the pressure which comes from the lack of privacy. Thus, it can be seen that we should concentrate more on entertainers’ and athletes’ performance on the stage or on the court and retain their privacy to them so that they can have a suitable quality of their life.
Indeed, many fanatic fans may view their idols as all life since these celebrities are the spiritual foundation for fans which help them successfully grapple and wrestle with the frustration and adversity. Hence, it is predictable that these fans are urgently get more information or daily life details of the celebrities. However, it is these behaviors that arouse the celebrities to call for reserving privacy to them. Overly exploring the privacy of celebrities is not a conducive to both of fans and celebrities. If one of the fan devotes himself to inquire every schedule of his idol, this celebrity have high possibility to disappear in the public’s eyes.
In conclusion, it is significant for everyone to own privacy, same to athletes and entertainers. Thus, respect is the only way to support them in order to let them thrive to themselves and us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 260, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'got', 'gotten'.
Suggestion: got; gotten
...redictable that these fans are urgently get more information or daily life details ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06211180124 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95480025971 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532091097308 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4379983559 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.304347826 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133296734353 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392622967589 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362169535459 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0736578493945 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274076451884 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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