integrated essay-TPO46

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integrated essay-TPO46

The article mainly discusses that the medical information about patients’ records should adopt in electronic systems instead of paper records and store them in paper forms, in the United States, and he provides tree significant advantages of the electronic records. On the other hand, the lecturer believes that author’s reasons are uncertain and he refutes the benefits of electronic records.
First of all, the reading asserts that if doctors utilize adapted systems to stock and keep patients’ records, it will less expensive and makes more opportunities to save money rather than old methods which use paper records. On the contrary, the speaker states that this way is not like significant issues to save money, due to doctors need old records of patients’ record emergency for legal reasons of signatures on the papers and also this is not costly store and keep them in electronic records.
Secondary, the passage claims that there are some errors related to poor handwritings which electronic medical records will reduce them. However, the professor refutes this idea and he believes that by this way can not decrease the mistakes of writings on the papers, due to via development systems, now there are some doctors who use pen and paper for their not takings.
Finally, the author posits that by storing data and information on the systems, researchers can use them for more explorations and this available data can be more useful and helpful in future. While the professor argues that this data are not fundamentally and access to this enormous data is difficult.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 183, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, so, while, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 257.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22957198444 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78661167385 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52140077821 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 21.2450331126 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.28302681 49.2860985944 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.0 110.228320801 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.125 21.698381199 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.75 7.06452816374 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449396001005 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189668673596 0.0996497079465 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136390371549 0.0662205650399 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259486561987 0.162205337803 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933024238831 0.0443174109184 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.3589403974 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 53.8541721854 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.0289183223 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.498013245 141% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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