integrated toefl writing
The reading and the lecture are both about online encyclopedias. whereas the author of the reading states that it has several problems., the lecutrer suggests that these problem are can be solved. The lecturer casts doubt on the main points made in the article by providing three reasons.
First of all, according to the reading, these users who enters information in encyclopedias lack in academic credentials. However, the lecturer disputes this point. She says that unlike the traditional online encylopedias can be monitored and correct any mistake in a matter of second not like the traditinonals which will remain for decades.
Secondly, the passage states that hacking can be a big problem even if the information is right. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. She argues that some information in these are in read-only. In addition, she points out even the hacker can not edit these writing, also, there are people who monitor any edit made in the encyclopedias.
Finally, the article claims that the readings in the encyclopedias are depth for the averge reader. On the other hand, the lecturer believe that you can find anything you want if it was in depth or not. She thinks that encyclopedias will help people what they want to know about.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'these problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; these problems
...ral problems the lecutrer suggests that these problem are can be solved The lecturer casts do...
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Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the article by providing three reasons First of all according to the reading th...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tinonals which will remain for decades Secondly the passage states that hacking...
^^^
Line 5, column 340, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nitor any edit made in the encyclopedias Finally the article claims that the read...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... any edit made in the encyclopedias Finally the article claims that the readings in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, whereas, in addition, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1039.0 1373.03311258 76% => OK
No of words: 209.0 270.72406181 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97129186603 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66148298479 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 145.348785872 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555023923445 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 13.0662251656 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 209.0 21.2450331126 984% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.2860985944 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1039.0 110.228320801 943% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 209.0 21.698381199 963% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 124.0 7.06452816374 1755% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0186022235805 0.272083759551 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0186022235805 0.0996497079465 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0111393092018 0.162205337803 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0192938494988 0.0443174109184 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 106.5 13.3589403974 797% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -140.66 53.8541721854 -261% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 5.55761589404 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 84.8 11.0289183223 769% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.03 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 17.25 8.42419426049 205% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 43.0 63.6247240618 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 10.7273730684 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 85.6 10.498013245 815% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 59.0 11.2008830022 527% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.