Integrated Writing Essay Tpo-54

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Integrated Writing Essay Tpo-54

The reading passage and lecture are both about how to save lake from dead zone which is because of the salinity. Whereas the author of the reading states that this three methods are efficient , the lecture suggests that this suggestions are unnecessary. The lecturer casts doubts on the main points made in the reading by providing three reasons.
First of all, according to the reading, direct removal from the lake's water in special desalination facilities. To put it more simply, while water evaporate, salt and other materials dissolved. However, the lecturer disputes this point. she says that this method may bring serious damage for human's health. Furthermore, she mentions that if some kind of toxic materials went into the air and people would breath can destroy people's health.
Secondly, the reading states that bringing ocean water which is less salty into the lake is another option for diminish the salinity. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. She argues that Pacific Ocean which is far as a hundred kilometer require a large amount of money to build construction and government can not afford its price.
Finally, the reading claims constructing walls which is divided several parts control the lake's salinity is another option. On the other hand, the lecturer believe that this kind of building would be easy to collapse when earthquake happen.
In conclusion, although the reading and the lecture are both about several categories which is protect lake from salinity, the three main points made in the reading are effectively challenged by the lecture.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...es that this three methods are efficient , the lecture suggests that this suggesti...
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Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e efficient , the lecture suggests that this suggestions are unnecessary. The lectur...
^^^^
Line 2, column 237, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...ever, the lecturer disputes this point. she says that this method may bring serious...
^^^
Line 4, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...ch is divided several parts control the lakes salinity is another option. On the othe...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'protected'.
Suggestion: protected
... both about several categories which is protect lake from salinity, the three main poin...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 255.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22745098039 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53960030362 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580392156863 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4019276612 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2142857143 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06452816374 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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